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Sophie_Preston
Sophie_PrestonLv21yr
2023-09-19 01:07

Well, the world building and concept was awesome but the author is a newbie. The sentence making seems to be forced not fluid. Character development, side character development is the worst i have ever seen. He is comparing the MC's 'Long' with a dragon....but chapter size is shorter than my PP. There are some illogical concept that author believes in,,,,such as MC can adjust his sudden increase in strength by practicing with needle and thread...

The Eternal Family

FamishedGod
4.0
168 Chs

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BloodyKing
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Interesting novel, even though I came for the "plot" I am surprised as it has suddenly become a mystery and now I am waiting to see how it all unfolds.

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FamishedGod
FamishedGodAuthor

Take this as a question and answer section. About 100 chaps in, I am sure where the story is headed and I'll answer some possible questions. - Will there be a Harem? Of course. -How big is the Harem? Very big but Mc's inner circle will only have some women. - Will there be Yuri?No, you may rest assured.- Will Mc get Ntred? No, Mc only steal, no get stolen. - Will it have a consistent Fantasy Power system? Absolutely, I love that thing! - Will the clone touch Mc Women? Absolutely No. not even a harmless handshake! You can ask more questions below

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Bibongsensei
BibongsenseiLv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
Darkman90
Darkman90Lv1

Maaaan, I was really starting to like this story but there are are some major flaws that is being an obstacle to enjoy and cherish this story. First of all, way too verbose and too many words used to describe/explain things, it sometimes makes the explanation messy and confusing at times. And I get lost in it and have to read multiple times in order to figure some things out but even then it is not clear. Which leads to, info dump after info dump! Like waaaaay tooo much information and after reading 110 chapters all I can say most of it is irrelevant and doesn’t really add to the story but more like placeholders and blank shots. I felt like the author tried way too hard to make it complex and unique in order to give the story depth but it became way too much of mess and unnecessary information made the story a pain the butt to read. Does it have potential? Sure, but potential will remain potential if the author can’t convert it to kinetic energy. But the way author tries to convert Potential Energy to Kinetic Energy is unnecessarily complex and bulky making the story hard to enjoy.

1yr
AatroxVoid
AatroxVoidLv15

Reveal spoiler

1yr
BookWorms007
BookWorms007Lv3

The story is too complicated. I skimmed through a few chapters. Booom....... I lost track of what is happening with the novel.( Spoiler Mc goes back in time, a lot of different weird abilities , his daughter from the future goes back in time.....) What a mess. This is not my type of novel

1yr
NamelessStory
NamelessStoryLv14

An amazing novel with a unique twist but the only problem I have is that the world building hasn’t been established yet

1yr
rbp
rbpLv2

i like the first few chapter simple, not complicated, nothing mysterious but after the mc went back time/reborn, i had hard time understanding the way author deliver his story (english is not my native language) it became confusing and mysterious to me. but this will not hinder me reading this novel, i might understand what is happening in the upcoming chapters. just keep pumping chapters don't drop.

1yr
Yang_ki
Yang_kiLv4

this story is for degenerates everything is good, maybe just little bit complicated, so many timelines and time travel but overall worth reading

1yr
Ace_of_your_heart
Ace_of_your_heartLv4

I hope you continue I can't wait for new chapters

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