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Darkman90
Darkman90Lv11yr
2023-08-24 05:55

Maaaan, I was really starting to like this story but there are are some major flaws that is being an obstacle to enjoy and cherish this story. First of all, way too verbose and too many words used to describe/explain things, it sometimes makes the explanation messy and confusing at times. And I get lost in it and have to read multiple times in order to figure some things out but even then it is not clear. Which leads to, info dump after info dump! Like waaaaay tooo much information and after reading 110 chapters all I can say most of it is irrelevant and doesn’t really add to the story but more like placeholders and blank shots. I felt like the author tried way too hard to make it complex and unique in order to give the story depth but it became way too much of mess and unnecessary information made the story a pain the butt to read. Does it have potential? Sure, but potential will remain potential if the author can’t convert it to kinetic energy. But the way author tries to convert Potential Energy to Kinetic Energy is unnecessarily complex and bulky making the story hard to enjoy.

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Kp to Kc convertion is needed.

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