it's a interesting story so far (I'm in ch 20) and I hope that it keeps getting interesting. I have a couple of advices tho, you should put more tags and explain that it is a sayan in the rwby. I don't like the name Kron but that's just my opinion so don't stress over it and finally i don't know why but when you write an a (alone)it's always a capital letter. For example: I was looking at the scenery when A nevermore appeared. if you can try to correct that mistake for future chapters. Overall I enjoyed the story so keep you work, I just wanted to give you a piece of my mind don't take it in a bad way please. Also, I don't know what to think about the artwork....
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Thanks for your review, I appreciate it. Also, I done that artwork while drinking Bacardi, Carta Oro, Superior Gold Rum. Also, -> A, I understand you're -> a meaning and will taker it under advisement, cheers.
No problem just trying to help. Also, in the following chapters I noticed that you use where instead of we are.Where is not a verb, it is a word used while asking the location of something or someone. in spanish is the word "donde". Once again don't take it in a bad way, I enjoy your story and just want to help improve. I myself are still very lacking in English as it is not my first language. Thanks for your work so far.
No, thank you for your help and Review.
