Review Detail of Lazy_Fox111 in Twilight: Really! I Didn't Ask For This!

Item: Twilight: Really! I Didn't Ask For This!
Rating: 3.2

Review detail

Lazy_Fox111Lv41yrLazy_Fox111

The mc is your typical smartass deliquent that makes you wonder if he is a reincarnation or just an oc with a system and foreknowledge. There are some few grammatical errors but it doesn't seem a major problem yet. The interactions are okay but it needs more work so that it wouldn't feel awkward. Overall, I might change the rating if there's further improvement in the writing.

Twilight: Really! I Didn't Ask For This!

Flaming_Lines

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Lakerus43Lv4Lakerus43

I mean, between a reincarnator and an Oc with a system and foreknowledge theres not much difrence is there?

5mth

Lazy_Fox111Lv4Lazy_Fox111

I guess I'm not clear enough, his mental age doesn't fit his current behavior.

Lakerus43:I mean, between a reincarnator and an Oc with a system and foreknowledge theres not much difrence is there?

5mth