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Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv101yr
2023-06-22 15:30

The mc sucks. A fantasy about smoking weed and being a loner. Also being a super awesome biker in Twilight. Not seeing much personality besides that. Not even hints of a more interesting one :/ Would've stuck around to give it a better chance, but when I saw the story wasted our time describing him selling weed it was too hard to ignore what this was about. Writing Quality - 3 Stability of Updates - 4 Story Development - 3 Character Design - 1 World Background - 4

Twilight: Really! I Didn't Ask For This!

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4.1
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AstralNinja420
AstralNinja420Lv14

You my sir are garbage

1yr
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Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

Can I be fresh garbage then? At least 4 other people clicked the review.

AstralNinja420:You my sir are garbage
1yr
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LastGod
LastGodLv5

thanks i was gonna waste my time on this

1yr
23
AkGreyback
AkGreybackLv2

Dude the story is not fully even started yet, Mc will get more time for development

1yr
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Hakujo
HakujoLv10

the author should have considered "first impressions" if there will be such thing

AkGreyback:Dude the story is not fully even started yet, Mc will get more time for development
1yr
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StarGazerr
StarGazerrLv4

Agree, finally someone understands, they think that readers are forced to read and wait for the character to develop, and forget the basics of common sense

Hakujo:the author should have considered "first impressions" if there will be such thing
1yr
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Voided_fox
Voided_foxLv4

First off dont you know you can find the twilight series in the fantasy section in the library? And you don’t like how he did it make your own or go back to reading Chinese novels ware the mc f**ks children

1yr
3
Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

You definitely have some ideas. But I'm up here on the moon faking the landings. Can we discuss later?

Voided_fox:First off dont you know you can find the twilight series in the fantasy section in the library? And you don’t like how he did it make your own or go back to reading Chinese novels ware the mc f**ks children
1yr
23
Voided_fox
Voided_foxLv4

Sure but wach out for the alien-dolphins

Daoist_Dan:You definitely have some ideas. But I'm up here on the moon faking the landings. Can we discuss later?
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1yr
Weizenbrot14
Weizenbrot14Lv4

reason because he was right? or because it is your dream? or is this your live in short discriped as a drug junkie?

AstralNinja420:You my sir are garbage
1yr
17
Weizenbrot14
Weizenbrot14Lv4

yeah like you? no thanks he should do more reviews and be helpful too people unlike you heh

Voided_fox:First off dont you know you can find the twilight series in the fantasy section in the library? And you don’t like how he did it make your own or go back to reading Chinese novels ware the mc f**ks children
1yr
16
Destiny_henry_1762
Destiny_henry_1762Lv14

guys you are just dissing someone's else work, if you don't like it then it's good. then say so, to me the work is great, I like weed and when the mutated weed came out I laughed cos I found it funny

1yr
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CrownClown666
CrownClown666Lv4

We must've come across the same ones. They get dropped after a couple of chapters. Twilight fan fics have the shortest lifespan in webnovel.

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1yr
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The_Petty_Knight
The_Petty_KnightLv12

1 it's a review your supposed to be honest when making a review 2 that makes me wanna read it less compared to this review

Destiny_henry_1762:guys you are just dissing someone's else work, if you don't like it then it's good. then say so, to me the work is great, I like weed and when the mutated weed came out I laughed cos I found it funny
1yr
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Adramelech
AdramelechLv15

8/10 likelihood of being dropped for no reason even when they are really good and with no warning

CrownClown666:We must've come across the same ones. They get dropped after a couple of chapters. Twilight fan fics have the shortest lifespan in webnovel.
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1yr
4
Hamtaro_
Hamtaro_Lv1

I wrote one some time ago, the thing with Twilight fics is that the author just wants to write a couple really awesome moments, but the rest of the setting is hot garbage and you have to do a whole lot of gymnastics to make it work. Example: MC is usually Bella's brother, but he doesn't murder her so you gotta rewrite her a bit, or make it so he doesn't care about her all that much. Then comes Cedric Diggory, you gotta justify not murdering him as soon as possible. After that you need to figure out what to do now that you've written those super nice romantic moments with FL (Rosalie in good fics, Alice in bad fics, Esme in crack fics.) so you end up dropping it or not publishing it at all. (my case)

Adramelech:8/10 likelihood of being dropped for no reason even when they are really good and with no warning
11mth
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Elvenerable
ElvenerableLv2

No se actualmente la historia es decente y buena

9mth
Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

?? Are you saying my review doesn't apply anymore or it gets better if you read past a certain point?

Elvenerable:No se actualmente la historia es decente y buena
9mth
Elvenerable
ElvenerableLv2

Mejora un poco , el MC sigue siendo un idiota y lo de la raza fenrir sigue sin mucho desarrollo pero en el ámbito amoroso y trama mejoro

Daoist_Dan:?? Are you saying my review doesn't apply anymore or it gets better if you read past a certain point?
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Weizenbrot14
Weizenbrot14Lv4

In short MC is a system user who is also a drug adict and smokes EVERY time; he is mister perfect everyone likes him for being a drug dealer. Teachers like him even thou he is being late EVERYTIME but are ok with why? because he has good grades yeah!!! police let him break the law multiple time reason? because Plot!!! Best Friends Parent's likes him why because the MC give they own kids drugs yeah!!!

1yr

GloryForAll
GloryForAllLv14

Reveal spoiler

1yr
GodOfLight
GodOfLightLv1

All I see is drug addict emo kid who think he is superior to all Truth to be told i don’t se any character development 24/7 he just want to be high

1yr
Judderbutter
JudderbutterLv15

Half the story is just him being high and so ping for a girl. Everyone likes him even his coach even tho he knows the mc is like the biggest drug dealer in the school. Then his personality is kinda trash with an average plot line. Author also didn’t post for like 2-3 weeks cause he was setting up some patreon thing and is putting the fic behind a paywall for a barely average fan fic

1yr
Lazy_Fox111
Lazy_Fox111Lv4

The mc is your typical smartass deliquent that makes you wonder if he is a reincarnation or just an oc with a system and foreknowledge. There are some few grammatical errors but it doesn't seem a major problem yet. The interactions are okay but it needs more work so that it wouldn't feel awkward. Overall, I might change the rating if there's further improvement in the writing.

1yr
Lizrock
LizrockLv4

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1yr
IamOblivion
IamOblivionLv4

Great fic so far.I highly recommend it. Trust me, you only need the first chapter to lock you in, and you will know for yourself if you would like it or not.

1yr
Scarface3699
Scarface3699Lv4

good until he introduced a Rosalie as a mate and still chose the character he made his celebrity crush (even tho he did that in his other story too) and picked shifter powerset which is crazy for someone whose supposed to look like urek mazino. The dialogue is mostly the main character getting high or simping for ana de Armas and her family. And i do mean simping because the MC's 2 modes are when he's with her and when he isn't.

1yr
DaoistywsVRo
DaoistywsVRoLv2

Goated story, don’t listen to the other reviewers who are simply mad due to the Mc smoking habits. It is refreshing for once to not have a basic copy pasted Mc in a reincarnation webnovel fanfic. The story is grammatically very good, pacing is not too fast not too slow in my opinion and helps follow the Mc through both his thought process and actions. The Mc has Sims like powers, that are pretty well done, allowing him to not be OP. I would recommend this story to anyone that isn’t a braindead generic webnovel reader who is looking for an actual good story with actual plot.

1yr
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