A Legend had died. Rest in Peace, Akira Toriyama

The story is fine overall. But I would recommend author to change the first chapter as it was not a good impression overall. To me he felt like a entitled Chinese young master with all his complaints. The rest of the story is good. The character interactions are interesting and he is not a two dimensional character which is great. I would recommend the author to make his own original storylines and not follow the canon too much. Maybe explore magic which is inherent in db universe. You can also add interactions with other aliens that we had not seen otherwise in canon like tuffles. Add your own lore if you want to like him meeting yamoshi and other cool and og stuff. Instead of following the same cliches that everyone seems to follow. Give your own twist to evolution of Saiyan and including stuff from gt and xenoverse and all that good stuff to make it more interesting to us readers. These are just my suggestions. Peace.

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I was skeptical at first due to the fact that I haven’t found a single Dragonball fic that doesn’t fall flat on its face or just retcon everything. However this fic has been amazing so far. The Author clearly knows ALOT about Dragonball lore and is very meticulous with the little details and I absolutely love it. Even though I’m not a fan of harems; this novel has been more than generous with everything else that I would recommend everyone at least give it a try.

Excellent Oc's backstory: From an ordinary non-nonsense man to Goku-Black's new successor and Goku and Raditz's brother. I hope that you can continue with this story and take some time to rest as well. Great job.

Author tries to create moments of tension where there is no time for it, an example of this is the MC facing opponents who are strong for his base form, but in his oozaru form would be easily resolved.

Really nice concept and grammar , really hope u continue

cooler is more intelligent and stronger than frieza and unlike frieza he believes in quality instead of 1000 soldiers he prefers 10 with intelligence and strength compared and unlike frieza who doesn't care about his soldiers killing him just because he wants cooler makes his soldiers train to become stronger and smarter at the same time that they gain better equipment cooler treats his soldiers and subordinates like soldiers the greater their achievements and loyalty the better their rewards he is polite and believes in loyalty he will not kill someone because He wants he needs a strong reason to eliminate a useful soldier unlike Freeza who is basically a spoiled and childish person that's why Cooler is more liked and loved by the fans than Freeza it's a shame he wasn't canon who knows with Toyotaro in command of dragon ball he doesn't bring coola and even bojack to the canon

My first review is for you ...and this is excellent, I really love the overall scene you created. Can't wait for next chapters