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Gian_CarpioLv41yr
2023-08-21 06:59

If you’ve read Supreme Magus you can skip the first 15 chapters. This book reminds me of Warlock of the Magus World if the author didn’t know how to write. The sheer audacity is there but the author has no handles on interactions, plot, foreshadowing, and intelligence. Writing fluctuates every chapter it feels like a different author is taking charge of the story. Character inconsistencies are at large and author narration doesn’t make sense. He establishes a rule then break it the next chapter. (Spoiler: A woman believes she mades him her slave, then after a day she sends forty assassins to kill him. Why would she do that to someone she has full control of? One second a guys an entire army to prevent anyone from knowing his name then next chapter the guy tells everyone and her mother his full identity, skillset, blessings and whatever. Happened two times already and has caused him more problems than he could handle. ) There’s no proper baseline of how things worked so instead of being immersed in the story you are threwn recklessly around it. Instead of being properly immersed in the world I feel like reading through a blurred window. If I didn’t get reminded of how the author killed billions of people and ruled the earth every chapter I probably wouldnt have known because of the character acts. The main character wouldnt care about the character as long as their on screen but as soon as they have a tiny interaction with mc he would rather share all his secrets to sacrifice for the character.

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