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Abhi_Axe
Abhi_AxeLv124mth
2024-07-31 18:47

Honestly I don't know how to describe this feeling that I am getting while reading this book but If I have to put my finger on it then it would be UNCOMFORTABLE I mean a lot uncomfortable 😖 At first it was progressing well and nice when there was only one MC but then came our OG and that's where I started feeling weird, How MC teaches OG to make his own harem and how he even helps him. And then when Ayumi (a sub heroine) came in the picture and that's where my patience wore thin. I mean just look at how our MC (he himself) helped her (sub heroine) realise her fetish (being cuck queen) with OG. In my opinion it would have been best ( at least better than now) if you have let OG's story progress WITHOUT MC interference at all if you really were trying to create two MC's kinda story tho it would have been perfect if there was only one MC. There are a lot other things I would like to say but I will stop here as it will discourage other readers To Author: A question for you, suppose you were a READER of this story (not Author), how do you think you would feel when you liked our MC (story wise) and Ayumi (literally) both, and suddenly there is a third person (OG) who f*** Ayumi huh?....I don't think it would be anything less for what I am feeling currently i.e., only if you don't have any weird fetish LOL Sorry But I don't think I can stay in this journey with you any longer tho keep up the good work.

I Became a Scum in Depressing Game

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3.6
346 Chs

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_ErAuthor

First of all, Ayumi is not a sub heroine. Yuta found Ayumi first, and if not then the main character Ryuki would have never met Ayumi. Ayumi's purpose in the novel was to make Ryuki and Yui get together. Also, From the beginning, I never said anything will happen between Ryuki, and Ayumi, and in the entire series, Ryuki never expresses any type of affection for Ayumi. So it's clear that there is no relationship between these two. Ryuki taught Yuta to have his harem is just for one chapter or two chapter, then there is no more teaching. Then Yuta got his second woman and after that I stopped writing about Yuta, and just focused on Ryuki. Yuta might have his harem, but those girls will never be introduced in the series, they are just background girls with no dialogues beside two girls. Also, any girl that Ryuki likes are his, and only his, Ryuki will get them in his harem and he will have them. I understand if you don't like series because everyone has their own preferences, but I just want to point out the above things I said.

4mth
Abhi_Axe
Abhi_AxeLv12

Sigh~....I totally understand you Author-san coz I know as an author you have to connect all the dots so it doesn't seem anything off in the story.....but you also have to understand as a READER TOO..... Again it's related to the question I asked you in my previous comment....For once forget yourself as an author and put yourself in the reader's shoes too and then tell me How would you (as a READER) feel when you see Ryuki as a MC from the start and then suddenly Ryuki made her (Ayumi) realise her fetish but not for himself but for OG. You have even made some lemon ch of Yuta × Ayumi, those who see Ayumi as potential Heroine (at least I see her as) and Ryuki as MC and then suddenly Ayumi×Yuta ch 😭.... It was like getting NTRd I know you have already mentioned in your synopsis about there being more than one MC but still...

4mth
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Crowing_something
Crowing_somethingLv14

Well as a Web Novel reader in average you would be right. As a normal reader , reading normal books or even a normal able-minded person , it would not cause any of this. This without even taking in consideration clear WARNINGS.

Abhi_Axe:Sigh~....I totally understand you Author-san coz I know as an author you have to connect all the dots so it doesn't seem anything off in the story.....but you also have to understand as a READER TOO..... Again it's related to the question I asked you in my previous comment....For once forget yourself as an author and put yourself in the reader's shoes too and then tell me How would you (as a READER) feel when you see Ryuki as a MC from the start and then suddenly Ryuki made her (Ayumi) realise her fetish but not for himself but for OG. You have even made some lemon ch of Yuta × Ayumi, those who see Ayumi as potential Heroine (at least I see her as) and Ryuki as MC and then suddenly Ayumi×Yuta ch 😭.... It was like getting NTRd I know you have already mentioned in your synopsis about there being more than one MC but still...
3mth
Abhi_Axe
Abhi_AxeLv12

Well I don't know about normal readers and what not but I clearly don't like these kinda development in a story and everytime I read these kinda novel I feel (I can't describe that feeling) so that's it for me. What about you do you like these settings?

3mth
userzimub88w6g
userzimub88w6gLv12

i lowkey feel bad for the author I'm not saying the writing is good but these reviews are definitely not written by normal people

2mth
Abhi_Axe
Abhi_AxeLv12

Well it was just my honest review, not wanting to belittle the author. Think of it just as a passing review, don't mind it. 😮‍💨

2mth
2
_lone_soul
_lone_soulLv11

same lol idc if i am not normal but its better than being c#ck, this novel give lowkey ntr vibes

2mth
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Abhi_Axe
Abhi_AxeLv12

Exactly 💯 for me it's so true.

_lone_soul:same lol idc if i am not normal but its better than being c#ck, this novel give lowkey ntr vibes
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Although the MC is good , but how can one story have 2 mc , you are trying to create 2 mc , which is very for every Story .In any story there can be one mc . Other can be supporting characters or side characters

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Daoist_Culture
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Interesting synopsis, I like evil mcs so the idea of him going to be good is not really fun for me, but I ll give it a go. Looks like there is some culture. And a big + for no ntr, thats for those who like green.

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Ahmed_Hajwani
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I haven't read the story, but when I read the synopsis, where the author mentioned that MC will not steal the others harem. So in this situation the author should at least have Little common sense, to keep a spoiler chapter where all the harem of our MC will be mentioned, so that the readers do not get confused at any point by mistaking someone else's women as MC's future girl, only for them to feel cucked later on. Stupid author

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Azrael_DAngel
Azrael_DAngelLv14

Well story seems to be good but since I don't like 2 mc setting and someone else having harem other than mc, I will not buy paid chaps iykyk. Anyway if you don't mind 2mc with each having their own harem then give it a try.

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One2Turtle
One2TurtleLv14

G

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aniket_keer
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From what I have read, this novel is unique, this novel has some dark things in it and reading that is not easy for the heart I am only reading this, so I can see Mc become a good person and save the heroinesBut if that didn't occur then I am dropping this

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Mahfuz_Aknda
Mahfuz_AkndaLv4

noice 🥵.. I read six chapters it is good . 18+ old readers recommended .. but update is slow, character is okay, world building okay but story is unique and interesting 😙

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Alanray64
Alanray64Lv15

Overall a disappointing read. Standard transmigration novel where the MC arrives in a world based on a Eroge game and of course he is the villain. The story itself was just to long in development, starting at him arriving at 5 years of age, but it dragged on through school years etc. after chapter 41 I threw it in. Initially the MCs (villain) goal was to save the heroines and sub-heroines from bad endings if not selected by the protagonist, think it was 4-5 Heroines and 3 sub-heroines, when out of the blue comes another transmigrator who also knows of this game and they team up splitting the girls between them. Mind you, both transmigrators are still young, oh and the second transmigrator is a girl (but maybe past life a guy, no idea). So 2 young kids are plotting, even discussing murder and later the MC actually incinerated a number of homeless bums. Yeh he prevented a future event happening but in my thoughts if he knew what was to happen then im pretty sure there were other ways to get around this episode. Still it happened and it really was kinda offputting. Anyways, the story was, in my mind, nothing exciting and read almost like a child’s story. I forget that a lot of Japanese novels tend to be rather formal and stiff in their delivery, which didn’t do this any favours. It was simply to childish and failed to deliver something that can capture a readers attention. Tl;dr - Try elsewhere for something more engrossing.

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Daoist3tDTa4
Daoist3tDTa4Lv2

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