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Dreyerboys
DreyerboysLv151yr
2023-08-12 03:46

Another generic progression-fantasy novel. It's okay, but nothing amazing or unique. If you're new to the genre, then by all means, give it a try. It's interesting enough, easy to read, and more like a slice-of-life than anything else. In fact, I'd go so far as to say that this novel should be classified as a Slice-of-Life. However, for those who have read plenty of magic-focused progression-fantasy stories, this is as basic as it comes. The MC has a unique cultivation system that sets him apart from the rest. He quickly becomes one of the strongest people in the "starter city" and moves on to the next one. I think there's an academy arc in there, a burdensome "younger sister", an auction where he obtains an op item, brain-dead villains, and more. The only difference between this one, and some of the better, more popular versions of it, is that the MC in this story is incredibly bland. No personality, no uniqueness, nothing. He just hunts down beasts and trains. I would've really liked to have seen more dialogue, more inner monologues, more... life. All in all, it's about average. Nothing special, but not bad. Comprehensive Review: Writing Quality (3/5): The grammar is fine, but like I said before, it's incredibly lifeless. There's no tension. No suspense. No emotion. No immersion. Most of the chapters are filled with the Author telling us what's happening instead of actually showing it. That's fine and all, considering he's probably a new author, but it really does kill the quality. Emotional scenes are left tasteless, but even when the Author does try to show, it feels forced. Telling and not showing is fine in Webnovels since if you had to "show" everything, the entire novel would take thousands of chapters. But, during action scenes, it's incredibly boring. I would like to actually experience those scenes with the MC. Update Stability (5/5): So far, the Author's been consistent, which is a huge plus. Story Development (2/5): If there is a plot, I can't find it. It's mostly just filled with the MC grinding, training, improving his cultivation, and reacting to certain events. Like I said, if this was a Slice-of-Life novel, I wouldn't criticize this part, but the author didn't tag it as such, nor does he portray the novel in that manner. Even then, unless it's about hunting (both humans and beasts) or cultivating, he's not very proactive. He just sort of floats along, doing whatever the author wants him to do. I think having some sort of direction would've really helped this novel, especially in the early stages. It takes so long (40+ chapters) to actually get moving, and even then, it's just more grinding, just in a different area. Other than that, things just kind of... happen. MC finds inheritance. MC trains. MC hunts. MC gets stronger. MC gets rich. MC buys stuff. MC helps younger sister. MC gets lucky. MC gets lucky. MC makes more money. MC gets stronger. MC leaves. There's no real depth to anything. His Cultivation Technique isn't all that unique. In fact, the world's whole cultivation system is incredibly simple. Mana Circles and Aura Circles (1-9). Like I said, it's a very easy read. If that's what you're looking for, then by all means, try it out. But for those of you wanting something more, you should probably look elsewhere. Character Design (2/5): If you couldn't tell by now, I'm not a fan of the MC. Rather, I'm not a fan of any character except for Trevor, but he's just a supporting character, and not much was known about him. However, at the same time, I think it's more that I'm not a fan of how the Author portrays the characters rather than the characters themselves. With how bland everything is, it's really hard to get a read on the character's personality, values, and interests. He basically does nothing other than train, train, train. I would really like to see more character interactions and some character development. It doesn't have to be anything drastic, but I would at least like to see the MC growing or at least, changing. World Background (3/5): Not too much is known about the world. I assume this might be further explored during the Academy Arc or somewhere further down the line, but I don't know. So, for now, I'll give it 3 stars, considering the MC isn't reincarnated/transmigrated or any of that stuff. A character inside their own world is a nice touch. Random Comment: THE ECONOMY! Oh my god! The economy in this story makes no sense! Money just seems to flow into the MC's pockets, but all the rest of these commoners out here are just poor blokes even though they're working hard too?! They only hunt like once a month? And have to do it in groups? What? Do they really get that injured every time?! Nonsense! Even if he is stronger than other 1st Circle people with his cultivation technique, it shouldn't be by that much. Not to mention, the prices of items make no sense. I think it said that 1 Star Coin (currency) could buy a meal. Let's say a loaf of bread, in real life, costs $2 (which is on the low end), that would mean 1 Star Coin is worth ~$4 at the worst. Yet, he's able to rake in hundreds of thousands, even millions, each month while only having strength equivalent to a 1st and 2nd Circle mage!? Huh? The man is even richer than the nobles! To top it off, all he has to do to earn that is travel like 5 minutes to the nearest forest, hunt a few beasts every day, and sell them. Is everybody in this world just useless? Where is all this money coming from, especially in a smaller town? He should've crashed the economy by now! Normally, I wouldn't even pay attention to this, as it doesn't matter, but it feels like the Author just arbitrarily assigns numbers to things without much thought. Money is brought up quite a bit, so this issue is very noticeable. I would've liked for there to be at least a little bit of thought behind the currency. Doesn't have to be much. Just a little outline in your notes would do. Overall: 3/5

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Tsetth
TsetthLv14

review my book next lol

Dreyerboys
DreyerboysLv15

You sure? lol My reviews can be pretty blunt. I try to be objective as possible, but it's impossible for personal feelings not to leak in there. (I say this because I'm assuming you're talking about [The Growth of a Titan]. Just a warning, but I'm usually not a fan of "master-disciple" relationships. Teachers and mentors are generally fine since they'll come and go in life and are more like friends. However, Masters are generally put on this pedestal, as if they're a supreme being controlling the MC's life. Their orders are absolute. The MC often relies on them too much. The MCs usually never tread their own path until later in the novel, when they realize their current path(cultivation) sucks and have to redo it. Either that, or it's so OP that they never have to think deeper other than, "I just have to follow the technique Master gave me".) Those are just a few of the problems I have with those kinds of relationships, but the gist is I don't like them. So, if you're okay with me going into it with a bit of a prejudice, then I'll give it a read. But do keep in mind I'll probably be hyper-focused on that aspect.

Tsetth:review my book next lol
Tsetth
TsetthLv14

Hmmmm, I want to say i did things a bit differently since the story formula is more of a Murim manhwas/novels style, but i might be wrong. Anyways go ahead! I'm interested to see how you'll react to TGT😁

Dreyerboys:You sure? lol My reviews can be pretty blunt. I try to be objective as possible, but it's impossible for personal feelings not to leak in there. (I say this because I'm assuming you're talking about [The Growth of a Titan]. Just a warning, but I'm usually not a fan of "master-disciple" relationships. Teachers and mentors are generally fine since they'll come and go in life and are more like friends. However, Masters are generally put on this pedestal, as if they're a supreme being controlling the MC's life. Their orders are absolute. The MC often relies on them too much. The MCs usually never tread their own path until later in the novel, when they realize their current path(cultivation) sucks and have to redo it. Either that, or it's so OP that they never have to think deeper other than, "I just have to follow the technique Master gave me".) Those are just a few of the problems I have with those kinds of relationships, but the gist is I don't like them. So, if you're okay with me going into it with a bit of a prejudice, then I'll give it a read. But do keep in mind I'll probably be hyper-focused on that aspect.
Cetas
CetasLv4

Can you recommend some action fantasy/cultivation novels that you deem to be good in most aspects? Ty in advance

GoldenStache
GoldenStacheLv4

I'd like to request that too, your reviews are hella long, but their constructive so I'd love to have you check out my dying book.

Dreyerboys:You sure? lol My reviews can be pretty blunt. I try to be objective as possible, but it's impossible for personal feelings not to leak in there. (I say this because I'm assuming you're talking about [The Growth of a Titan]. Just a warning, but I'm usually not a fan of "master-disciple" relationships. Teachers and mentors are generally fine since they'll come and go in life and are more like friends. However, Masters are generally put on this pedestal, as if they're a supreme being controlling the MC's life. Their orders are absolute. The MC often relies on them too much. The MCs usually never tread their own path until later in the novel, when they realize their current path(cultivation) sucks and have to redo it. Either that, or it's so OP that they never have to think deeper other than, "I just have to follow the technique Master gave me".) Those are just a few of the problems I have with those kinds of relationships, but the gist is I don't like them. So, if you're okay with me going into it with a bit of a prejudice, then I'll give it a read. But do keep in mind I'll probably be hyper-focused on that aspect.
DayDreamer637
DayDreamer637Lv3

Achievement Unlocked [The Glorious Critic] . But jokes aside, this was one of the most informative reviews I have seen in my whole life.

TheUnsus
TheUnsusLv3

Don't mind me. Just putting a comment here so that I can asks for a review in the future XD

Heroen12
Heroen12Lv2

w0w, you really saw all that what was lacking in this book. I feel that you can become an chief editor. ngl

A_N_O_N_Y_M
A_N_O_N_Y_MLv3

Bro, I just started to write a novel( about two and a half weeks) and would like you to review my story. My friend tells me that the story has some problems, but he hasn't read much. I want a professional review, and please be as harsh as you can.

A_N_O_N_Y_M
A_N_O_N_Y_MLv3

It is called X-season 1.

A_N_O_N_Y_M:Bro, I just started to write a novel( about two and a half weeks) and would like you to review my story. My friend tells me that the story has some problems, but he hasn't read much. I want a professional review, and please be as harsh as you can.
Chickennoodlesoup1
Chickennoodlesoup1Lv2

HI, could you review my book?, i really like how constructive yours is, and i think if you did mine, id have a basic overview of what to change since thats been on my mind recently! Thanks again if you do it, still thanks anyway!.

Silver_Scribe
Silver_ScribeLv1

check out my novel "Beyond Horizons -The reincarnation", LMK your thoughts

NispedanaSan
NispedanaSanLv13

Wow this is such a good review. Can you recommend a good one (ideally no harem) but with system heheh

NispedanaSan
NispedanaSanLv13

Ahem since people seem to be asking for reviews, I'd like to ask for one too xD (My story is in FL, but its themes are ML) I'm trying to crossover to the ML side too, but I'm struggling, and a good slap in the face might be just what I need

Dreyerboys
DreyerboysLv15

Well.... I don't know if I'm the best person to ask for that sort of thing ahaha. However, as a surface-level overview, you seem to be doing pretty well for yourself. I don't want to feed the "imposter syndrome" hahaha. Also, reviewing on request doesn't seem quite as genuine to me so I generally don't unless I'm already interested in the novel or I feel like the author might be able to gain/learn something. It's kind of like telling someone not to think about *insert thing*. Their brain will automatically think of that thing. If I go into a novel in order to review it, I'll be hyper-critical of everything. "Oh, they misspelled 5 words in that chapter. There were also a bunch of minor grammatical mistakes." "Paragraphs and sentences don't flow as smoothly as they could." "Is this a plothole?" "Hopefully, the characters stay consistent and grow consistently." Those kinds of things. It's kind of hard to just enjoy a novel for what it is when you're on the lookout for things to review, whether they be good or bad. Maybe I'll give your novel a shot, but I probably won't be finishing all 800+ chapters before reviewing lol. Though, it does look interesting. Anyways, don't get your hopes up! Haha

NispedanaSan:Ahem since people seem to be asking for reviews, I'd like to ask for one too xD (My story is in FL, but its themes are ML) I'm trying to crossover to the ML side too, but I'm struggling, and a good slap in the face might be just what I need
NispedanaSan
NispedanaSanLv13

It's more like I'm stuck and I needed a jolt. Just check out free chaps and tell if it's pacing can do decent in ML xD hahhaha thanks if you're doing it~

Dreyerboys:Well.... I don't know if I'm the best person to ask for that sort of thing ahaha. However, as a surface-level overview, you seem to be doing pretty well for yourself. I don't want to feed the "imposter syndrome" hahaha. Also, reviewing on request doesn't seem quite as genuine to me so I generally don't unless I'm already interested in the novel or I feel like the author might be able to gain/learn something. It's kind of like telling someone not to think about *insert thing*. Their brain will automatically think of that thing. If I go into a novel in order to review it, I'll be hyper-critical of everything. "Oh, they misspelled 5 words in that chapter. There were also a bunch of minor grammatical mistakes." "Paragraphs and sentences don't flow as smoothly as they could." "Is this a plothole?" "Hopefully, the characters stay consistent and grow consistently." Those kinds of things. It's kind of hard to just enjoy a novel for what it is when you're on the lookout for things to review, whether they be good or bad. Maybe I'll give your novel a shot, but I probably won't be finishing all 800+ chapters before reviewing lol. Though, it does look interesting. Anyways, don't get your hopes up! Haha
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