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WhiteNightingaleAuthor1yr
2023-03-21 04:19

The author here. Thoughts? Do tell me what you think in the reviews. Enjoy the book. This is for WSA, so I would appreciate power stones once that opens up. Have fun guys.

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Mrblack45Lv15

harem ?

Ovierode_IgoruLv12

better not be

Mrblack45:harem ?
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FaierLv14

same question as the person above. harem? single female lead? romance?

WhiteNightingaleAuthor

I am currently thinking of having one female lead. So no harem.

MaedreasLv13

is this confirmed?

WhiteNightingale:I am currently thinking of having one female lead. So no harem.
MaedreasLv13

bro thinking isnt strongest part of webnovels writers so what did u decide on? and pls write what u want and not what your audience wants, many writers lose passion for their work if they r forced to write something they dont want

WhiteNightingale:I am currently thinking of having one female lead. So no harem.
AWESOME_01Lv4

It was a good novel until the clichés. Not my cup of tea

YourN1ghtmareLv2

you overused "was" in your novel. i'm not too good with english too, but i think you made a lot of mistakes about that, try to count how much "was" you put in a single chapter.

machadogbcLv15

Have you decided if there is going to be romance? And if it’s going to be one love interest or more?

WhiteNightingale:I am currently thinking of having one female lead. So no harem.
NeverUMindLv15

Late to the game here, but great job so far. I thought 70,000 dead lives was extreme, and I would like to see a couple of the people survive and pop up throughout the story. However, I get the setup. Personally, I agree with no harem. I see the harem trope too often. It’s typically used to inflate the greatness of the hero. He’s so great that one woman can’t hold him, but to take a decisive hero and then make him indecisive with women creates an unnecessary flaw. However, there is an opportunity to explore a polyamorous type relationship as opposed to a harem. That would be original.

WhiteNightingale:I am currently thinking of having one female lead. So no harem.
FallenAngeILv13

Yea, original way of getting bombed with 1 star reviews. That together with y*ri, NTR and other such tags don't work on webnovel.

NeverUMind:Late to the game here, but great job so far. I thought 70,000 dead lives was extreme, and I would like to see a couple of the people survive and pop up throughout the story. However, I get the setup. Personally, I agree with no harem. I see the harem trope too often. It’s typically used to inflate the greatness of the hero. He’s so great that one woman can’t hold him, but to take a decisive hero and then make him indecisive with women creates an unnecessary flaw. However, there is an opportunity to explore a polyamorous type relationship as opposed to a harem. That would be original.
NeverUMindLv15

There’s an audience for everything.

FallenAngeI:Yea, original way of getting bombed with 1 star reviews. That together with y*ri, NTR and other such tags don't work on webnovel.
ikkaLv13

harem? yes or no? romance? yes or no?.. and if there is romance or harem in this.. then ffs change you freaking tags so that people know!..

WhiteNightingale:I am currently thinking of having one female lead. So no harem.
FOOL01Lv14

I've been enjoying the novel so far, recently got to the part where the Duke reached the city and things went 0-100 real quick. I gotta say, this is the first part of the story that i currently dont like. Im not saying the Duke cant do what he does, but it shouldn't be without consequences from the other dukes and king/emperor. For a mage to easily do that, regardless of rank would be idiotic. You have loss of a city, resources, incomes for the country, etc, whilst undermining the countrys current ruler.I hope you dont gloss this over in the future. otherwise its just way to over the top to establish a forced 'villian'/'antagonist'.that being said, ive been enjoying the story so far, and look forward to where it goes.

SinisterLawsLv12

Harems definitely ruin the story.

Ovierode_Igoru:better not be
NeverUMindLv15

Guess you haven’t read Blacksmith of the Apocalypse.

FallenAngeI:Yea, original way of getting bombed with 1 star reviews. That together with y*ri, NTR and other such tags don't work on webnovel.
FallenAngeILv13

I have the first 150-ish chapters, what happens later on?

NeverUMind:Guess you haven’t read Blacksmith of the Apocalypse.
NeverUMindLv15

Mina Fin and Seth are together. Polyamorous. There’s no detailed scenes that I can remember. And all the characters were written as sexually open from the get go.

FallenAngeI:I have the first 150-ish chapters, what happens later on?
FallenAngeILv13

But do they sleep with other ppl?

NeverUMind:Mina Fin and Seth are together. Polyamorous. There’s no detailed scenes that I can remember. And all the characters were written as sexually open from the get go.
SinisterLawsLv12

Mrblack45:harem ?
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