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2023-09-08 10:09

If I were to describe this novel in one word, it would have to be 'redemption'. When I first read the novel, it had about 74 chapters and to describe it, it was... not good. The writing quality was really bad, the action scenes were incoherent and a jumbled mess, and there was a massive issue in a lack of 'show don't tell' causing a general quality level of around 2 stars. However, after the author took a break of around a week or two, the author seemed to take my criticisms and suggestions into consideration, and the quality had massive improvements on all available issues. The writing quality is now a solid 5 stars, the story now has a solid pace 4 star worthy, the character design is still 5 stars, and only updating stability and world background remain at 3 stars. Fantastic comeback, author.

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I haven't gave a review in ages but this deserves more recognition/reviews so I granted it one so please don't mind it if my review is pretty meh. P. S. I do wanna clarify this story involves harem even though there's no tag for it although I swear I saw the tag for it before or maybe I'm just delusional. -(The Main Character)- His general information is in his character sheet but it doesn't describe absolutely everything about him like for example, his background gets more in depth at the end of the volume 1 so you won't know everything about him in the very beginning. One thing I will note is he is on a scale of 1 to 10, a 7.5/10 on the dense scale so if you have a low tolerance for dense MCs then please don't hate and kindly move on but if you don't mind that then this read will be very worth. Another thing to note is the mc's abilites are very taxing for him considering his body isn't up to Gensokyo standards yet so he faints/loses consciousness quite often in various fights. He's got the technique, power, speed but is missing the final ingredient which is stamina/endurance but his determination makes it up kinda. -(Story/Plot)- The story is really just about the crazy bizarre butler adventures of Shun in Gensokyo as a human outsider brought in. His influence on Gensokyo, espesically on the residents living there are the main key aspects in my eyes to look at. -(Action)- Lovely action scenes that are largely coherent and should be somewhat easy to imagine. -(Grammar)- The Grammar is very understandable and only has a few mistakes sprinkled in from now and then. -(Update Consistency)- Based on what I spy with my little eyes, this fanfic updates daily but the chapter lengths aren't exactly long which is completely fine since having both daily and long chapters would be asking for way too much. -(Conclusion)- This is my 2nd time reading a Touhou fanfic and I'm not that knowledgeable about Touhou but I quite enjoyed this personally. Also the fact that this is a updating harem Touhou fanfic with a male MC which is very rare, it raises my score. I'll give this a final verdict of 8.9/10 as it fits mostly all my tastes and I hope from the bottom of my heart this doesn't die randomly.

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