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NitrogenousBeingLv1411mth
2024-04-06 06:09

Review from around chapter mid-60s (brace for wall of text): Interesting fantasy tropes fill the story. There are many nice details, but the beginning dumps us headfirst into it without setting enough expectations about where it's going. The result is a rough and painful beginning. Additionally, there are too many quotes of wisdom cluttering up all of the MC's actions and speech. Dialog is often packed with cringy one-liners and unnecessary references. I understand it is supposed to be MC's personality, but how can he be simultaneously like a 20-30-year-old shut-in pop culture nerd and a guy whose entire life experience is 5 years with a strict master learning all about fighting and magic? And, I know that his teacher also supposedly drove all these silly references into him, but only so much can happen in those few years. Regardless, the author is inserting his interests into the MC, where they don't feel like they belong, and it is jarring and annoying. And don't get me started on how "groovy" is one of the most obnoxious catchphrases... It's also baffling that he simultaneously has a crippling hatred of a certain, let's call it an "ethnic group," but immediately decides one of them will be his BFF because she's pretty, shares a couple of similar life views, and happens to be assigned as his guide. The beginning of that relationship should have taken longer to develop. Speaking of things that are too fast, the pacing. Let's start with a battle to enter the school, followed by rapid-fire shortcut level-up adventures before a single class or a general picture of the school. Out of breath yet? Surprise! It's time for dungeons and an invasion! Finally, tens of chapters in, we are addressing what an adventurer is... Still, some aspects of the writing felt slow, but let's leave it alone. No, wait, let me say one more thing: Too many useless dialog tags! Overall: There's some good stuff in there. With a reworked beginning, I might recommend it. As is all too common in interesting but poorly started novels, the middle part was much more engaging because there was finally a sense of direction and enough pieces of the longer-term plot to engage immersion. It only needs a little cleaning of the cringe and a few rounds of restructuring.

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Fellow_Daoist_1902Lv4

This is a really nice novel, with writing quality that far surpasses that of the average entry on this platform. There are barely any grammatical errors, and the flow of the story is natural. Characters seem like real entities, rather than one-dimensional cardboard cutouts. The pop-culture references evoke quite a few chuckles as well, making the setup more relatable. There are a few complaints that I have as a reader, however. The protagonist's teacher, Divah, is mentioned countless times in the story and many of her quotes are used to depict Willam's thought process. A disconnect is created as we are never given a direct introduction to Divah, only picking up tidbits of information here and there from other characters. It feels like William treats her words as gospel, but to a reader there is no indication as to why her ideology holds so much weight, apart from her supposedly unmatched strength. Some elements of Willam's mentality are also worth studying, like his reaction when his oversight causes Liara to die. He may be slightly more affected by the death of another compared to his own, yet it is but a passing thought in his journey. A short- lived remorse, if I may, since there seem to be no consequences to his actions. When he is back in the past, so is she, so it is glossed over pretty quickly. Does the fact that he was responsible for the death of his companion not affect him more? If he didn't have the power to go back to the day of his death, would he have taken it so lightly? These are questions worth pondering. There are some other minor issues I personally have with this story, but overall, this is an intriguing tale that I would encourage people to read. Hoping that the locked portion of the book does not show a marked decrease in quality. I give the author my best wishes.

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TBH I read this novels a few months ago. Just came back now to give my feedback. The writing quality is peak. The author has a way with words that's for sure. The world building is also done well. This novel has an interesting world background which is shown even in the first few chapters. Now here comes the problems. The MC just started looking for cheats a few chapters after the novel started. The characters weren't even explored properly before the MC already started getting cheats to become overpowered. This may not be a problem when it only lasts a few chapters but the entire reason(or at least a major part of it) the MC even came to the academy is to get cheats from all over the academy. So most of the early chapters were him going around getting cheats with a waifu(whom he literally just met) tagging along. As exciting the first few chapters were, the following where subpar at best. This made me drop the novel without even being able to read a mere 50 chapters. There is nothing wrong with the MC getting cheats and becoming overpowered(he is the MC FFS) but it is too much when a major part of the earlier chapters are filled with treasure hunting. This made me feel like the novel didn't have much depth to it. However, just because this novel was not up to my standards does not make this a bad novel by any means. There is nothing wrong with giving this novel a try and arriving at your own judgements. In the end, what's good and what's bad is subjective. In this review, I talked a lot about the negatives of this novel without exploring the positives much. So even if the negatives seems like a but too much to you, I would suggest giving this novel a try.

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