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Invictus6
Invictus6Lv52yr
2023-04-27 09:02

The story, writing, and plot is great. The prologue is the issue, it’s too long. 20ish chapters of a baby and he tells people he’s reincarnated. Is too much for me to keep my interest for a story where everyone knows he’s reincarnated. Thats like one of the rules of isekai, not to tell people you reincarnated

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Pewpewcachoo
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That isn't a rule.

Invictus6
Invictus6Lv5

True it’s not a real rule but if youve read anyother reincarnation fic with them telling them about it. It never ends well, it devolves into a wish fulfillment and power! with either an extremely convoluted plot or so simple it’s boring to read with none of the characters acting as they should be portrayed. There’s so few that have been done well that it’s usually recommended to not share anything from the past life. Go for it if you think you can manage best of luck to you!

Pewpewcachoo:That isn't a rule.
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Pewpewcachoo
PewpewcachooAuthor

Thanks for the feed back, I am trying my best. But so far it's mostly a dumpster fire... But I suppose that is what most fan fic is anyways.

Invictus6:True it’s not a real rule but if youve read anyother reincarnation fic with them telling them about it. It never ends well, it devolves into a wish fulfillment and power! with either an extremely convoluted plot or so simple it’s boring to read with none of the characters acting as they should be portrayed. There’s so few that have been done well that it’s usually recommended to not share anything from the past life. Go for it if you think you can manage best of luck to you!
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Rune_NaN
Rune_NaNLv1

That sounds like an overall writing quality issue not an issue with that particular trope. Plus I think you have your cause and effect backwards as in telling people you are reincarnated does not make it bad but that bad stories just tend to include that plot point.

Invictus6:True it’s not a real rule but if youve read anyother reincarnation fic with them telling them about it. It never ends well, it devolves into a wish fulfillment and power! with either an extremely convoluted plot or so simple it’s boring to read with none of the characters acting as they should be portrayed. There’s so few that have been done well that it’s usually recommended to not share anything from the past life. Go for it if you think you can manage best of luck to you!
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Mysterious_Lord
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ydoBoN
ydoBoNLv1

I really wanted to enjoy this story but it's not for me. First and foremost, let's cut to the chase: the writing quality is excellent. The comedy is spot-on, with jokes that hit their mark most of the time. What's impressive is that the humor doesn't take away from the seriousness of the story, and vice versa. The main character is intriguing and boasts a well-developed personality, adding depth to the narrative. Now comes the issues with the story 1) "The story's pace leans towards the slower side. (personally, it didn't bother me too much.) Nevertheless the first 30 chapters, the narrative is told from a baby's or child's perspective. To the extent that you could almost label the first half of the story as a slice-of-life tale. While this deliberate focus on early life experiences might appeal to some readers, it did contribute to a slower progression in the overall plot, which, for me, was acceptable but may be a point of consideration for others. 2) The portrayal of other characters' personalities is a notable issue. The author seems to have difficulty maintaining consistency in how characters behave. This inconsistency is especially noticeable with characters like Hank Pym, The Ancient One, and Nick Fury, although it's a recurring problem throughout the narrative. Some character interactions defy logic, while others seem to undergo drastic shifts in their traits simply to fit the storyline. This inconsistency in character portrayal made it challenging for me to fully connect with the story, as it often felt like the characters were not staying true to themselves. 3) Logistical errors (This is the one that really bothered me). The story is riddled with unrealistic and absurd logic. Most of the time, the characters' plans, theories, and actions are poorly explained and clearly not well thought out, which made it hard for me to fully immerse myself in the story. It felt like there were gaps in the storytelling that left me questioning the characters' decisions and the overall plot.

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