Invictus6

be racist

so many cliffhangers just end it already

ball size, if have both, both incrementally increase

true she has a computer that can pretty much hack anything technological but keeps forgetting about it

that's the weakest and and most cop out answer for the military officer, I want him to act like an idiot even though the man is in charge of hundreds to thousands of lives. As for Anakin the council knew and allowed it to happen as they wanted to gauge the chosen one and have him to learn to control his anger at being a slave. especially since he was an outsider and older. as for other instances with other younglings, sure it happened a but they actively put a stop them.

you've got a ship captain in charge of multiple ships making dumb decisions and making it seem like he's a 10 year old on his first assignment when hes not considering the context you wrote him under. Who's only purpose is to make the jedi look good. Then you've got jedi, JEDI who can sense emotions do nothing about the blatant bullying and budding anger and resentment of the bullies. Then you wrote in that jocasta noticed but did nothing?

that is significantly worse

overall not a bad fic its simply mid. Though it is riddled with spelling errors and brain dead characters. the mc is not a reincarnated person as the synopsis would have you believe but an oc as the he doesn't have any memories of his past life making the first few chapters useless, feel free to skip them as they have no impact on the story.

how is this guy an officer, leading ships and men into battle? so immature and childish