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LightningGodWolf
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2023-04-11 01:45

I am truly loving this story! It keeps me interested and entertained. It even made me emotional quite a few times. I highly recommend reading this Fanfic. The only thing I could wish for is daily updates, but I understand not all Authors are capable of updating daily. Please keep working hard on your story and I’ll keep supporting you! Thank you!

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If it didn't take me 5+ hours to write a chapter I would update more... I can write a lot faster then that, but I normally write out part of the chapter, then edit, add, edit, clean up, reread it all. Then check to make sure I didn't make some crazy plot hole. So much work!

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I really wanted to enjoy this story but it's not for me. First and foremost, let's cut to the chase: the writing quality is excellent. The comedy is spot-on, with jokes that hit their mark most of the time. What's impressive is that the humor doesn't take away from the seriousness of the story, and vice versa. The main character is intriguing and boasts a well-developed personality, adding depth to the narrative. Now comes the issues with the story 1) "The story's pace leans towards the slower side. (personally, it didn't bother me too much.) Nevertheless the first 30 chapters, the narrative is told from a baby's or child's perspective. To the extent that you could almost label the first half of the story as a slice-of-life tale. While this deliberate focus on early life experiences might appeal to some readers, it did contribute to a slower progression in the overall plot, which, for me, was acceptable but may be a point of consideration for others. 2) The portrayal of other characters' personalities is a notable issue. The author seems to have difficulty maintaining consistency in how characters behave. This inconsistency is especially noticeable with characters like Hank Pym, The Ancient One, and Nick Fury, although it's a recurring problem throughout the narrative. Some character interactions defy logic, while others seem to undergo drastic shifts in their traits simply to fit the storyline. This inconsistency in character portrayal made it challenging for me to fully connect with the story, as it often felt like the characters were not staying true to themselves. 3) Logistical errors (This is the one that really bothered me). The story is riddled with unrealistic and absurd logic. Most of the time, the characters' plans, theories, and actions are poorly explained and clearly not well thought out, which made it hard for me to fully immerse myself in the story. It felt like there were gaps in the storytelling that left me questioning the characters' decisions and the overall plot.

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