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2023-02-27 21:12

First and foremost I have to give huge kudos to the author for such eloquently written material. The descriptions are rich and believable without being overstuffed with unnecessary details. Every word feels like it has a purpose to me and I really respect an author who has not only good grammar but a way to carry a story so effortlessly with decent pacing and a plot that could go in any which way. I won't lie, when I first started reading I thought the mc came off as sort of a jerk but the longer I read the more he grows on me. His nonchalance to many things at first can be blamed on the life he has led up to where the story begins. When reading I find the system to be perfectly placed and not overbearing. It doesn't seem like the author is using the system to fill in words but it actually adds and supports the story rather than getting in the way. I also really thought the breaking of the fourth wall was charming. One thing I might suggest would be making really long, descriptive sentences that set the scenes a little bit smaller. I found a couple in early chapters that could be broken down into 2+ sentences to give people's minds a little bit of a break while reading. Otherwise, the flow is really good and I think it's well-paced. I'm really excited to see what the author adds to an auxiliary chapter in the future. This book is a wonderful introduction to tropes like transmigration or systems

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