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brother_of_Thor
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2024-01-04 04:36

I like the story and the way it is improving, the further development But for me i could not understand why is the author making reading more complex, like he could have just said I am always thinking about him instead he goes on explaining poetically, becoz of it, it is only making harder to understand I don't know whether it is to increase the word cound odr whatever it may be but that is the only thing which I don't like about it

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Approaching the boat, something caught my eye, and a sense of wonder and anticipation washed over me. Despite its small size, it exuded a certain charm that set it apart from the other vessels in Prowlers' Cove. It was a sight to behold, showcasing the ingenuity and craftsmanship of its creator within this fantastical medieval world. The boat's hull, made of polished wood, shimmered under the moonlit sky. Intricate carvings adorned its sides, depicting mythical creatures and symbols of ancient lore. Each stroke of the chisel seemed to breathe life into the wood, creating a tapestry of fantastical scenes that stirred the imagination. Though smaller compared to the larger ships, the boat's sail was a work of art in itself. Woven from sturdy fabric, it displayed vibrant colors and intricate patterns that danced in the breeze. Embroidered onto the sail were symbols of ancient runes and sigils. like do you really have to explain it in three paragraphs. whyyyy?

Satan03
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Haha I apologised for that multiple times I just went with flow of it and I'd make sure that never happens again - and thanks for the review 😊🫂 appreciate it very much

brother_of_Thor:Approaching the boat, something caught my eye, and a sense of wonder and anticipation washed over me. Despite its small size, it exuded a certain charm that set it apart from the other vessels in Prowlers' Cove. It was a sight to behold, showcasing the ingenuity and craftsmanship of its creator within this fantastical medieval world. The boat's hull, made of polished wood, shimmered under the moonlit sky. Intricate carvings adorned its sides, depicting mythical creatures and symbols of ancient lore. Each stroke of the chisel seemed to breathe life into the wood, creating a tapestry of fantastical scenes that stirred the imagination. Though smaller compared to the larger ships, the boat's sail was a work of art in itself. Woven from sturdy fabric, it displayed vibrant colors and intricate patterns that danced in the breeze. Embroidered onto the sail were symbols of ancient runes and sigils. like do you really have to explain it in three paragraphs. whyyyy?
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In simple terms, this is a GREAT NOVEL, and needs more recognition.Now let's ddep dive...Pros:The world-building is pretty spot-on – not too complicated, not too simple.I love the MC's personality unpredictable yet intriguing.Side characters are well-fleshed out.I didn't spot any grammatical mistakes.The pacing is Just right!Cons:Occasionally, the descriptions of scenes are excessively lengthy.In very few cases MC's decisions/actions seem confusing and sudden(**spoiler **like how he killed Freya and the prostitute and Tiga) although that seems to be part of his personality but I hope they make sense down the line.My expectations:Mary, second most explored side character in terms of screen time, needs significant character development. The current Ren couldn't care less about the pain she caused the previous Ren. She's basically worth zilch to him as long as she's not in his way. Currently, she's just a hypocritical and narrow-minded character. But, if her character stays the same till the end, it's gonna feel like a waste of time. She'll end up as a brain-dead character not worth the time invested. Let's hope that doesn't happen! Her character arc should logically conclude, regardless of her eventual romantic choices.Whether this novel goes harem or not, it's cool either way. But every girl involved should get some solid character development, showing off what makes them unique and strong. Ren's relationships shouldn't just be for show.That's all for now...Great work author and ... DON'T DARE DROP

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