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Mister_Robot
Mister_RobotLv41yr
2023-09-09 04:54

A below average fanfic that started out with huge potential. As the story progresses, you'll start questioning why the author even thought of making the Mc transmigrate when it wouldn't have made any difference if he wrote the story from real Andrew's pov. It's a waste of time if you wish to read a quality fanfic. I wouldn't be surprised if this turns into a harem novel soon with lots of tropes found in cringefest Chinese webnovels.

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Eternal_Paradox
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can you recommend some quality fanfiction

Eternal_Paradox
Eternal_ParadoxLv11

boycut Sola land

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