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DaoistUdrot0
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2023-03-14 12:18

Something that should be read at every point of the day

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The concept of the story is great as it combines different stories into a bigger world, but unfortunately, this is the only good quality of the story. Grammatically speaking, the story is horrific and barely understandable. Past, present, and future tenses are non-existent, and the author has no excuse for this type of writing quality, especially with free apps such as Chat GPT and Grammarly available to assist with editing and proofreading. Regarding the plot, the story makes no sense. The author skips introductions, transitions, and interactions just to arrive at what they consider the 'good part.' If you haven't already seen all the TV shows or movies referenced in the story, then the author won't explain a thing. Relationships are non-existent. The MC barely speaks with anyone, and for plot convenience, the next chapter, he's suddenly friends with everyone out of the blue. The interactions between characters are poorly written, feeling forced and rushed, with everyone in the same scene reacting the same. They don't feel like individuals; instead, they are more like NPCs. The powers are unrealistic, with the MC discovering seven new powers each chapter for plot convenience. There is absolutely no reason to justify his god-level intellectual ability to discover and create new powers. He thinks about them for one or two sentences, and then they pop into existence. The pacing is the worst aspect of the story. Half the story feels like an outline with bullet points that the author is trying to cross off. Overall, the story needs significant improvement in grammar, plot, character development, and pacing.

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