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BadDad_201
BadDad_201Lv141yr
2023-03-06 22:44

I really hate when authors make the Mc mentally unstable for the sake of character development. I know as an author it seems clever and unique, but when you see this kind of trope so many times, as a reader it becomes annoying and obvious because you expect how the character is supposed to develop. When he was first transmigrated and decided to leave the dukes house instead of waitin to get disowned, it made him seem real decisive and mature but later on when he interacts with other characters or his actions he acts like a 13 year old. what makes readers want to read a novel is the premise of the story and first impression of the Mc. When you change that it’s almost like a smack in the face to us, when we thought we were getting a mature, decisive, witty, funny, and Chad Mc but what we get in turn is a whiney, mentally unstable 13 year old with a cringe system. IT RUINS THE CHARACTER. So even though we know he will grow it makes that process so much more annoying. In conclusion for a new author it’s a pretty good story and in the future I’m sure it will be a masterpiece, but as of right now it’s pretty mediocre. I hope his development won’t be a long drawn out process because it waste the readers time. Best of luck to the author ✍️ hope u keep writing💯

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TheAncientOnell
TheAncientOnellLv6

well said!

Madwriter_2377
Madwriter_2377Lv3

Sounds reasonable

Asif_Shahriar_Nafi_2069
Asif_Shahriar_Nafi_2069Lv2

I totally agree !! It seemed to have some potential in terms of plot but the author completely ruined the character. Will drop it

michibadgurl
michibadgurlLv4

Well that’s sad.. im scrolling for new novels now 😵‍💫

Asif_Shahriar_Nafi_2069:I totally agree !! It seemed to have some potential in terms of plot but the author completely ruined the character. Will drop it
lolbingolol
lolbingololLv13

U have to read it for urself to know if u like it. I like it alot and some don’t. Also he doesn’t whine for no reason.

michibadgurl:Well that’s sad.. im scrolling for new novels now 😵‍💫
michibadgurl
michibadgurlLv4

Already did. See my review in the latest review lol. I was disappointed.. started great but makes no sense there’s not much chnage after 100chapters..

lolbingolol:U have to read it for urself to know if u like it. I like it alot and some don’t. Also he doesn’t whine for no reason.
Great_Young_Master
Great_Young_MasterLv5

I agree with almost everything that you said except the part where you said that him leaving the Duke's house was decisive and mature. NOTHING about that was decisive or mature at all. His brother literally just greeted him, then insulted him and talked about how he's not his brother, then said to his dad that he's not his dad and was surprised that he got hit, then, he left the house because of that. How is that decisive and mature at all? That was a big indication of what the future of the story is gonna be like.

BadDad_201
BadDad_201Lv14

I agree, although he didn’t handle it in a mature way I believe it was the correct choice to leave if he was going to get disowned regardless

Great_Young_Master:I agree with almost everything that you said except the part where you said that him leaving the Duke's house was decisive and mature. NOTHING about that was decisive or mature at all. His brother literally just greeted him, then insulted him and talked about how he's not his brother, then said to his dad that he's not his dad and was surprised that he got hit, then, he left the house because of that. How is that decisive and mature at all? That was a big indication of what the future of the story is gonna be like.
Oladebo_Olamide
Oladebo_OlamideLv15

👍

A_i_ve_L
A_i_ve_LLv13

💯💫👍

ShiroNeko280
ShiroNeko280Lv4

Yeah

Asif_Shahriar_Nafi_2069:I totally agree !! It seemed to have some potential in terms of plot but the author completely ruined the character. Will drop it
Ireallylikereading
IreallylikereadingLv4

if that was an indication of the future of this novel as you have said then that would mean that you agree whether you like it or not that this novel is of bellow average quality.

Great_Young_Master:I agree with almost everything that you said except the part where you said that him leaving the Duke's house was decisive and mature. NOTHING about that was decisive or mature at all. His brother literally just greeted him, then insulted him and talked about how he's not his brother, then said to his dad that he's not his dad and was surprised that he got hit, then, he left the house because of that. How is that decisive and mature at all? That was a big indication of what the future of the story is gonna be like.
Arcadia23
Arcadia23Lv4

yep. thanks for mentioning it. it saved my time really

Haytham_23
Haytham_23Lv3

He literally knows his future besides at that time he was nyrel without Edwards memories ,most of all he has no relationship between them ,thomen is just Edwards adopter father , he never really loved him .Besides Nyrel wants to avoid death flag .So I will say it's a wise decision

Great_Young_Master:I agree with almost everything that you said except the part where you said that him leaving the Duke's house was decisive and mature. NOTHING about that was decisive or mature at all. His brother literally just greeted him, then insulted him and talked about how he's not his brother, then said to his dad that he's not his dad and was surprised that he got hit, then, he left the house because of that. How is that decisive and mature at all? That was a big indication of what the future of the story is gonna be like.
Haytham_23
Haytham_23Lv3

Bro just don't judge the chapter based on 100 chapters ,he will literally become op start from chapter 110

Asif_Shahriar_Nafi_2069:I totally agree !! It seemed to have some potential in terms of plot but the author completely ruined the character. Will drop it
Great_Young_Master
Great_Young_MasterLv5

So? Since he's gonna get kicked out soon then what he should've just stay there and get the benefits of staying there. If he has no relationships between them then why did he throw a tantrum like a child instead of using them for the time being and come up of better plans when he gets his bearing together while he's still being taken care of by them? Dude, how old are you?

Haytham_23:He literally knows his future besides at that time he was nyrel without Edwards memories ,most of all he has no relationship between them ,thomen is just Edwards adopter father , he never really loved him .Besides Nyrel wants to avoid death flag .So I will say it's a wise decision
Haytham_23
Haytham_23Lv3

first of all read the full novel, before commenting , i already told you he was nyrel without edward or amaels memory Nyrel knows his own death and he wanted to get stronger thats why he left the family and nyrel doesnt know that he is adopted because it was not shown in game also edwards memory was sealed by his birth mother

Mahin_Khan_8789
Mahin_Khan_8789Lv4

i sweat to God this main character personality make me wanted beat the shit out of him until he became cunning enough I mean seriously what the f*** is wrong with you rather than plotting and scheming and think of how to increase your strength and became the strongest one this bastard is thinking about how to follow plots and using 13 year old child mentality to your so called original game future knowledge. I mean seriously what the f*** is wrong with you are you a f****** little stupid b****from the moment he transmigarate into the game or game world everything is bound or fated to change its an inevitability that cannot be denied. I mean it's a magical world where you can gain strength so his main focus should be how to increase his strength and become the most powerful one but this f***** is thinking about how to follow up his nonsense and how to use political and stupid game plot in a world where power rules everything. I think that he forgot in front of absolute strength all schemes plot manipulation deception everything is pointless . I read the game one and game 2 and honestly game to is much better because of many character interactions but yeah the main things remains that he forget the most important thing.

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Review after 1st part of 2nd game ended NOTE: Don’t drop the novel if you are at the end of 1st game, you will be missing out big time! The good: - Lore, Grammar and Fighting descriptions are fantastic. - Amael character development is one of the best I have ever read about. Currently, he is my favorite MC in a novel here, as he is getting more “Protagonist Moments”. Don’t judge him for the first 100 chapters!!! - 2nd game have been full of tension & action between the Main Cast, which is fun and exciting to read and re-read. - John presence in the 2nd game is a mayor plus to the story. Hope he gets an even more relevant role. - Author has improved in what I think is the weakest part of the novel: World- building, Multiple POVs & Foreshadowing. The Not So good: - Villains, Antagonist and Special characters (like Nihil, Raphiel, 3rd goddess, Falkrona Family or Edenis Raphiel’s leaders) should have more “screen time”, even if they are not going to be directly addressed soon. The little cameos here and there add more expectancy to us readers than just mention them from the MC perspective. - At times, it feels like author doesn’t want to drag things more of what he has planned and sometimes that might leave plot holes (like not showing Behemoth’s reaction to Nora’s injuries in Dolphis, Ante Eden reaction to Manuel failing in Zestel or Iris project remaining an enigma) and this make [Event]s feel a tad rushed. - With how many things Sancta Vedelia has to explore and address, I’m not sure if 200 chapter will be enough. - The updating stability was on the slow side with only 1 novel. Now he is working on 2. But one shouldn’t mind waiting if the quality has been as good as the last chapters. One of my favorites books, deserve 5 stars: keep the good work author.

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