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Ficklepickle783Lv11yr
2023-08-21 12:35

So read a little bit ahead on the chapter titles I am some of the beginnings of those chapters and boy when the main character describes in that first chapter on how the novel the East Chi is based on that she read took on a different path that no one expected in such well that is very very true. Spoilers ahead of you don’t want to know So when main character leaves off with the prince, it’s two different country as we know, but in the time she somehow gets to where the Windsors are, and during the time she has to break something off her connection to Rachel and her family and Miguel manners first kind of is that that whole relationship development with Rachel is gone because author decides to give her a romance with the common girl. My opinion, it feels like the author decided to do the truth, because she didn’t know how to write continuously with Rachel as the main love while getting to some of the different plot points in her book, such as meeting the Windsors, even though they’re the enemies of her, Rachel’s family, and I guess this is what the illusion alluded to twists and plots the most Raiders don’t take one mentioning the sky world book that the main character fell into

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