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Prothanis
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2023-07-01 12:36

I was enjoying the read up until chapter 48, although I was sure MC was mentally retarted long before that, but i still enjoyed it and was anticipating how the story will further unfold. Only to be hit in the face with a poorly thought out ‘twist’. This story could have been something great. One of the most disappointing reads thus far, mostly because I was actually looking forward for what lay ahead. Anyway, I don’t recommend reading this and wasting your time like I did.

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