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Lv131yr
2023-03-04 11:18

Great read and fantastic story telling up until chapter 48, MC suddenly becomes incredibly stupid, through out the first volume MC changes her future and recognises it, not only that she makes promises to never betray FL and shows to be developing feelings for FL, however 3 chapters later after seeing a new future on her current path she betrays FL even though she knows why the future she saw happened. MC should have instead allied her and FL houses, and used the first princes self destruction to boost second princes power and support, so when the the first prince comes into power (if he still could at that point as he should be a national embarrassment at this point) his demand for MC to marry him will have no support from his supporters as they would deem hostile action against MC’s family political suicide at best. I’m sorry to say that I dropped this book due to actions of MC which I find incomprehensible. But I wish the author the best for the book’s future

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SillexaLv13

i think i agree with you because the first prince can't do anything if rachel and her father support her i mean the king can't even do a thing to Rachel's father and razor already said that she can change the future so why does she have to leave rachel when she's her only hope in her life and i really really hate betrayal it makes my blood boil. But thank you tho i enjoy the story i hope that you will continue and more people will read your story but im sorry i will drop it.

IncognitumLv13

I agree with you guys on this. I‘m already contemplating whether to drop this or not. Well, Rachel’s the only reason why I’m hesitating to drop this as I‘ve come to love her character. It just sucks that the MC became stupid and gullible. MC ends up betraying FL over a reason that wasn’t a problem to begin with as long as she won’t betray the FL, and yet proceeded to do the very thing that had caused her demise.

OhAriLv13

Do Rachel and the mc gets together?

Incognitum:I agree with you guys on this. I‘m already contemplating whether to drop this or not. Well, Rachel’s the only reason why I’m hesitating to drop this as I‘ve come to love her character. It just sucks that the MC became stupid and gullible. MC ends up betraying FL over a reason that wasn’t a problem to begin with as long as she won’t betray the FL, and yet proceeded to do the very thing that had caused her demise.
IncognitumLv13

Yes

OhAri:Do Rachel and the mc gets together?
Yuri_is_LifeLv12

I'm thinking about whether it's worth reading. The reviews are quite controversial. Although many against epilogue of volume 1, what about the rest of the book? The author has become better and has given a satisfactory story and ending, or there will be more "unpleasant" and "controversial" moments?

Lv13

Sorry but I only read to chapter 48, and at the time of my review there were 72 chapters. Hope others can help you

Yuri_is_Life:I'm thinking about whether it's worth reading. The reviews are quite controversial. Although many against epilogue of volume 1, what about the rest of the book? The author has become better and has given a satisfactory story and ending, or there will be more "unpleasant" and "controversial" moments?
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AdalfarusLv14

A Compelling Novel with Missed Opportunities in Story Development The novel under review, set in a vividly imagined medieval world, presents a gripping storyline and well-developed characters that make for an overall enjoyable reading experience. However, it is not without its flaws. The story development takes an unfortunate turn at the end of the first volume, as pivotal decisions made by the author on behalf of the characters seem to lack coherence and emotional resonance. One such decision involves the treatment of Rachel, a crucial character in the narrative. The choice to abandon her and label her as a monster, as dictated by the author, is not only heart-wrenching but also conflicts with the promise made to her and her father. This betrayal not only shatters Rachel's trust but also seems to be an unnecessary plot device that detracts from the emotional impact of the story. An alternative path that the protagonist could have considered would have been to take Rachel with them when escaping from the clutches of the crown prince. This course of action might have prevented the devastating consequences that followed, such as Rachel losing one of her flower petals and a significant amount of life. Additionally, the choice to betray Rachel has far-reaching implications, as it strains the relationship between two influential families and potentially the imperial family as well. The King might choose to side with Leriana's father, a close friend. This alliance is likely to start a feud with Rachel's father over the broken promise, further intensifying the conflict surrounding their families, which could lead to much bloodshed, as they control half the military of the empire. While the novel's overall quality is commendable, the storyline at the end of the first volume, and subsequently all volumes thereafter, could have benefitted from more thoughtful development by the author. By exploring alternative paths for the characters and maintaining consistency in their actions, the narrative would have been more engaging and emotionally satisfying. Nonetheless, readers who appreciate intricate plotlines and rich character development will still find much to enjoy in this fascinating tale. The novel leaves us questioning the author's choices, but eager to see how the story unfolds in subsequent volumes. Total score 3.4, because all criteria except story development are good. Suggested Revision: A simple solution to address this issue could be to alter the protagonist's actions towards Rachel. Instead of explicitly calling her a monster, the protagonist could choose to leave without saying anything. As a result, the events surrounding the loss of Rachel's flower petal could unfold differently. For instance, Rachel might feel betrayed because the protagonist left without an explanation, or someone else could spread lies about the protagonist's reasons for leaving, leading to a more reasonable portrayal of the protagonist's actions. This adjustment could strengthen the emotional resonance of the story and maintain the protagonist's integrity.

Yuri_is_LifeLv12

Who should read and pay for this work? Only those who are in ABSOLUTE despair to read completed Yuri novel, despite its poor quality. 1) It is worth saying right away that the author has absolutely no respect for readers. She obviously does not know English, so she writes in her native language and then uses an online translator. This is not a problem in general, many people do it... But author did not even bother to correct the basic pronouns errors. This is not only disrespectful to readers, but also just stupid!!! Many who could potentially buy this just drop it halfway!!! 2) Our heroine, Leriane, is the most hated character in this story (I would even say on the whole webnovell). She's dumb, naive and useless (but everyone loves her). She's the kind of person who doesn't deserve a happy ending. There was a scene in the book when Leriane was being held hostage and the maids wanted to disfigure her face. My reaction: fair, maybe it will teach her something!!! 3) The story could have been more or less Ok if the author had adhered to the spirit of the first volume. Then it seemed that this was a typical Mary Sue story with dense MC and comedic undertone. But then the author decided that she wanted to write a serious story with all sorts of betrayals, hidden villains, visions of the future and so on... But you can't just WANT to write a masterpiece. That requires talent or a hard work... 4) Most of the story we have a one-sided romance. For most of the story, Leriane feels asexual-aromantic and only at the end she begin to be more proactive. If you are one of those who are satisfied with the fact that high-quality mutual yuri will only be at the end, then Ok. But I prefer that the main couple become an official at least in the middle of the story. If not, then there must be at least passion and tension between them. And I'm not talking about smut. But at least something. But alas. Dense asexual-aromantic, remember?

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