Ok so this story has various problems but the story seems somewhat intresting so ill continue reading. The problem with grammar- Grammar in particular the sentence structure can be all over the place and confusing, the words used on the otherhand are generally spelt right. Also the author really likes to use full names, the full name of the Mc, his computer friend, Rick Grimes, and the other side characters which generally adds unneeded fluff to the text. Problems with formatting-Theres quite a lot of repetition and it can be quite unclear on whos speaking and to whom with random breaks in between speech, for example: "The cdc blah blah blah and that one doc blah blah" "And so and so on" This being cut in two despite it being the same character speaking which makes no sense. The author could really make great use of somekind of spellchecker like grammarly or get an editor to read his work before he published so that said editor could point out the mistakes in the chapter for the author to fix. Sorry for the long review just wanted to make one. Tldr: Lots of grammar mistakes(mainly sentence structure), kinda reads like a translation but seems intresting so ill continue to read
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