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WoahBuddy
WoahBuddyLv12yr
2023-01-04 10:51

I'm disappointed, but the author does an excellent job in terms of writing. I only read chapters one through eight. What I like about this story are the background and world-building. The author does a great job of giving us an image of the environment. I also like the storytelling and flow of the story. But it can be rigid and forceful. What I dislike most is the dialogue. It would have been better if the story had a Southern writing style. It's difficult for foreigners to understand, but it's what I wanted to see. Unfortunately, this story has an Asian resemblance, almost like an MTL. It would have been better to add strategic locations, like Wal-Mart, back when you could buy guns in the good old days. I would have liked to see more realism involved and fact-checking. Lastly, I didn't enjoy the repetitiveness of certain words and expressions. Expanding your vocabulary and finding other ways to express the MC would help. Overall, it's a decent 3.5 for me.

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Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6

You can still buy guns in walmart, just not ar-15's. Also can't get handguns anymore. Some walmarts don't have them, but basically every walmart in the south does.

Avrin13
Avrin13Lv15

nobody buys guns at a Walmart.

Hentai_Senchou:You can still buy guns in walmart, just not ar-15's. Also can't get handguns anymore. Some walmarts don't have them, but basically every walmart in the south does.
Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6

Obviously they do, or Walmart wouldn't have them

Avrin13:nobody buys guns at a Walmart.
Primordial_Two
Primordial_TwoLv10

they sell rifles and shotguns(no pistols or automatics) they are usually on active display during hunting season

Avrin13:nobody buys guns at a Walmart.
Domikers
DomikersLv3

Yeah, the dialogue is ass

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