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Kw0z
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2023-05-17 14:03

Thought I’d give this a try since it has so many chapters, but the grammar is genuinely just unbearable. Characters say things way too unnaturally, and even after skipping all the way to chapter 50, the robotic dialogue still hasn’t changed. Every character seems uptight, and never relaxed even in situations where they should be. I personally just think the author needs to improve his English so that everything doesn’t sound so formal.

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SrCuervo
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About the translation, this is almost perfect after chapter 370, unfortunately I don't have time to translate 300 chapters again. You can see my grammar in my new novel "The Beyond Supernatural", that is my current level of translation since the chapters I published in this novel are written months ago. As for the robotic state of dialogues, I made the protagonist like this and it eventually develops. You can see that development after chapter 130, thanks anyway for reading. I am currently making a new fanfiction based on my first novel and the first world will be "The hunger games"

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