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Hawkeye_07Lv151yr
2023-07-11 19:07

Going to start with getting the bad out of the way: you will find errors and a lack of ponctuation at times, it's not very bad (there are worst in this app) but you need to be ready for it ( it probably wouldn't be a bad idea to get an editor but those thing cost money i guess) and also, this is more annoying then bad (alot of people do it in this ap), the writer, sometimes tries to "milk" it, he doesn't do it alot but it does appear from time to time.Now, with the bad out of the way, the story is very good, you can see he took some inspiration from Only I Level Up, if you like it you'll like this, the story progresses at an even pace, the main character is relatable, the world is very interesting and the side characters are solid, the writer is very good with updating the story ( that might change with time because of life but so far so good) and you can see the writer as plan for his story that, this is me guessing, will take sometime to complete so the story will be around for a while. I recommend this story for everyone.

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Thank you so much for your detailed review .

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