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coldog22
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2023-05-26 01:27

I can't get past the grammer issues and repetitive sentences. Multiple paragraphs in the same chapter contradict themselves. The story may have had potential, but I can't continue this to find out.

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Zero_writer
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Thanks for taking the time to write a review. I know the grammar is not good, especially in the starting chapters. I will soon rewrite the starting chapters, it is just getting delayed because of some reasons.

coldog22
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If/When you do, please comment on here again. I'll go back and read from the beginning. If it's improved enough to get me hooked, I'll update my review.

Zero_writer:Thanks for taking the time to write a review. I know the grammar is not good, especially in the starting chapters. I will soon rewrite the starting chapters, it is just getting delayed because of some reasons.
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