Cliche but entertaining plot ideas poorly woven together into a story. As it stands, this story is more a stream of thought than a story. The creativity is there, the writing is not. Each chapter gets a sub-50 score in the free version of Grammarly. Full of run-on-sentences and practically zero punctuation, there are plenty of places for improvement in this authors writing - but it can improve if he tries. Both names and beginnings of sentences need capitalization, sentences need to be broken up into logical segments (Run the paragraph through any number of free pieces of Text-to-speech software to hear it for yourself), and the author needs to start aiming for scores 50+ on Grammarly before posting - with an ultimate goal of eventually reaching 90+. Once that's done, the only issue left is rhythm to which I have no real suggestion to fix besides practice. If this author chooses to continue writing, I pray they make appropriate use of the free tools and advice to improve their work - elsewise the score of this review shall stand testimony aside its kin.
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So bro any recommendations free tools like grammarly??
