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2023-05-06 13:48

I really loved it, I hope more comes out sooner. Hope that you continue this series. I just hope that the story explained more things better than just having huge paragraphs explaining what was happening like info dumps.

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Thanks for the review. I try to avoid doing too much info dumps but I am still a novice writer. If you have any detailed suggestions or examples on how I could avoid info dumps, I would appreciate it.

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Hi, Author here with a shameless 5 star review despite my story saying otherwise. The purpose of this is to clarify some things about this novel and its story to the viewers. First, this book is not meant to be some amazing story with unique plot development or anything truly extraordinary. If that was what you are looking for, then this isn't for you. This isn't to say that I plan to write a copy and paste story with repeated clichés all over the place, but I won't go into this novel expecting an amazing story with plot developments and story arcs that have never been done before. This novel was always something I started writing to fill up my free time and also finally act on my passion for writing which brings me to my next point. This is the first novel I have ever written. The quality is not going to be amazing and honestly, I am already extremely happy with the support I have gotten for this book so far as it was completely unexpected to me. Now, to clarify the biggest doubts about the story, this is NOT A HAREM!! Personally, I love harems... when they are done well that is. Unfortunately, I neither have the skill nor confidence to say I can write a good harem story with interesting characters and epic character growth and development between the MC and the female leads. The MC will interact with various women throughout the story but the story will not progress into a harem. If that was what you were looking for, this is not the novel for you. Also, you may see some negative reviews and comments about the early chapters of my book and I am ashamed to admit that most of those reviews were true. However, after I finished the first volume, I went back and took the time to make corrections to the earlier chapters, making Lake appear less like a creep and the reaction between characters feel more realistic. Although I can’t say it completely fixed all of the problems with the early chapters as I was still deeply inexperienced when writing them, it helped to deal with the major ones. These changes did not affect the overall story in anyway so if your someone who has read ahead already, there is no need to go back and read these chapters. Finally, like I said before, this is my first novel, so any feedback or flaws you may have spotted in my novel, whether they be grammatical errors or your personal opinion on the story is always appreciated. These things help to progress my writing skills and allow me to gain a completely new perspective on how to approach writing a story arc or chapter which all helps to improve the quality of my work. If you still choose to stick around and continue to read this book after reading this review, I appreciate you taking the time to read this novel.

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