Man. Wt f is this?? I feel like my logic dying. Not only is MC generic CN Mc, at some point I felt like this is just a great translation of a regular CN novel. If you like this novel, either you are reading this while keeping your brain shut or you’re just too used to CN novels by now. I mean, the way MC se Xually harassed a girl just in the first 5 chapters and the girl, instead of feeling creeped out and hitting MC back, she blushed. YES she f ing BLUSHES from Se Xual HARRASMENT!! And guess what, at one point I felt like not MC manipulates the fate any make everyone brain dead, he makes himself brain dead. This makes me soo mad. Like where’s the laws? Where’s the logic? Why is everyone brainwashed and brain dead.
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I don't know how to start this reply so I would just say how I honestly felt about the first few chapters. I really regret how I wrote them as I felt that they had immediately lowered the writing quality of the work when I looked back at them from later chapters. As I stated in the synopsis, this is my first work and when I first started writing, my writing skills weren't that great, my story planning and basic foundations were also severely lacking leading to the first ten or so chapters coming out like a really bad CN novel. It was only around chapter 13 or so that the story started to become "better". I'm not saying that my novel is great or that the story suddenly became amazing, I'm just saying it doesn't feel like a average poorly written CN novel from that point on.
Man. I feel bad now. Bruh. Anyway, I would really recommend you to edit the 7, 8, 9, and 10th Chapters. How about you just add something like an ‘auto acting mode’ which was recommended to MC by system. This made him lose control of his body and act like the arrogant guy he was acting like. Second, you can add his thoughts while he’s not in control of his body. This will definitely make the quality jump to much higher. Furthermore, you can just make it so that since this incident, MC just didn’t use the auto acting function, making it easier for you to edit the chaps up, and add something interesting in future chaps.
This will definitely make most of the people not drop this novel just from the start. Anyway, good luck with your novel. Sometimes the novel fits my taste perfectly, while sometimes it makes me soo mad…
Btw, instead of Instant OP in the start like Master of Fate, you could have made him Fortune Teller or something. Then increase his level and Class later on. And I feel like if it becomes too generic of a Novel, readers might start losing interest. The title and start is unique but if it becomes too much of a cliche, readers will start to lose interest.
I wish you had started reading my book earlier. All of these tips would have been helpful when I had started out. I did make efforts to amend the early mistakes in later chapters but your input has been immensely appreciated.
