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Bullshitter
BullshitterLv142yr
2023-03-28 16:09

I like the concept of the story. And it has potential. But when the 'damsel in distress' scenario happens in chapter 4 itself, it's so disappointing. And the way the MC speaks to other women just irks me. What I'm saying is, HAREM is fine. But it should be done tastefully otherwise just don't do it. When you bring a woman this soon into the story, it just ruins the future plot. Another novel with potential got ruined.

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Lagaru
LagaruAuthor

thanks for the review, I try to steer the story away from this concept in the later chapters as I realized I'm not good at writing those kinds of things. Since I'm a new author and this is my first book, I decided to just focus on what I'm good at writing, which arguably enough, is combat and power growth. This isn't to say that's all the novel will be about but it will have a deep focus on it. Thanks for the genuine review and feedback.

secretplotter
secretplotterLv2

Couldn't agree more with you such a waste

Kingspence999
Kingspence999Lv13

it was really just a plot device to help him understand the master of fate role better and get some rp points quickly

OuterGodACSqts
OuterGodACSqtsLv13

Yep. I stopped reading because I DETESTED the way he acts and speaks to Women, It was REVOLTING.

The_Reader5050
The_Reader5050Lv4

In the story, it state before he have the system he have like emotion, and it a act

OuterGodACSqts:Yep. I stopped reading because I DETESTED the way he acts and speaks to Women, It was REVOLTING.
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Lagaru
LagaruAuthor

Hi, Author here with a shameless 5 star review despite my story saying otherwise. The purpose of this is to clarify some things about this novel and its story to the viewers. First, this book is not meant to be some amazing story with unique plot development or anything truly extraordinary. If that was what you are looking for, then this isn't for you. This isn't to say that I plan to write a copy and paste story with repeated clichés all over the place, but I won't go into this novel expecting an amazing story with plot developments and story arcs that have never been done before. This novel was always something I started writing to fill up my free time and also finally act on my passion for writing which brings me to my next point. This is the first novel I have ever written. The quality is not going to be amazing and honestly, I am already extremely happy with the support I have gotten for this book so far as it was completely unexpected to me. Now, to clarify the biggest doubts about the story, this is NOT A HAREM!! Personally, I love harems... when they are done well that is. Unfortunately, I neither have the skill nor confidence to say I can write a good harem story with interesting characters and epic character growth and development between the MC and the female leads. The MC will interact with various women throughout the story but the story will not progress into a harem. If that was what you were looking for, this is not the novel for you. Also, you may see some negative reviews and comments about the early chapters of my book and I am ashamed to admit that most of those reviews were true. However, after I finished the first volume, I went back and took the time to make corrections to the earlier chapters, making Lake appear less like a creep and the reaction between characters feel more realistic. Although I can’t say it completely fixed all of the problems with the early chapters as I was still deeply inexperienced when writing them, it helped to deal with the major ones. These changes did not affect the overall story in anyway so if your someone who has read ahead already, there is no need to go back and read these chapters. Finally, like I said before, this is my first novel, so any feedback or flaws you may have spotted in my novel, whether they be grammatical errors or your personal opinion on the story is always appreciated. These things help to progress my writing skills and allow me to gain a completely new perspective on how to approach writing a story arc or chapter which all helps to improve the quality of my work. If you still choose to stick around and continue to read this book after reading this review, I appreciate you taking the time to read this novel.

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