webnovel
TrueDawnAuthor2yr
2023-01-22 07:46

It's been three months since I've started writing this novel, so now I can tell you more things in this review with greater certainty. Right off the bat, I'm sure you'll notice that this novel's MC is in a similar setting as the one from TLM, being an NPC in a game world. However, that's where the similarities end. I won't tell you much about the entire story, but I can assure you that you won't be disappointed once you pick it up, especially now that I've gotten feedback from you readers, allowing me to polish this story to the next level. To those who are about to start reading the novel, and to those who have stuck with me since the beginning, we're all in for a wild ride. I hope all of you stick with me till the end.

Liked by 31 people

LIKE
Replies14
LushLagLv15

any romance?

TrueDawnAuthor

none as of yet

LushLag:any romance?
SkyfailLv15

Kinda hope it stays this way. Web novels without romance are either rare or I'm just looking in the wrong place. But tbh as long as it won't become a harem I don't mind either way.

TrueDawn:none as of yet
TrueDawnAuthor

at the very least, i can assure you that there will be no harem.

Skyfail:Kinda hope it stays this way. Web novels without romance are either rare or I'm just looking in the wrong place. But tbh as long as it won't become a harem I don't mind either way.
ArcherArchXLv12

No Harem Yes Romance, however if u are not feeling confidence in doing it, dont do it, It would a great novel

TrueDawn:at the very least, i can assure you that there will be no harem.
NelswykLv14

I hope that there will be some romance (not harem). Otherwise a big part of his humanness will be missing.

TrueDawn:at the very least, i can assure you that there will be no harem.
Arkanghelik_PrinceLv3

yeah, even if it's with the characters having a bit of troubles with their feelings for each other. 💖

Nelswyk:I hope that there will be some romance (not harem). Otherwise a big part of his humanness will be missing.
darkanitmageLv15

is the mc a smart one or a dumb one or a Logic one

TrueDawnAuthor

at first, he acts dumb and becomes incredibly idiotic in his actions, though at some point he changes. I'll be changing the beginning part to reflect a different personality in the future, but for now, that's how he is.

darkanitmage:is the mc a smart one or a dumb one or a Logic one
darkanitmageLv15

1 last question do u have -----------------‐-------------- in the story bc thay get Annoying when u listening to it

TrueDawn:at first, he acts dumb and becomes incredibly idiotic in his actions, though at some point he changes. I'll be changing the beginning part to reflect a different personality in the future, but for now, that's how he is.
TrueDawnAuthor

only used a few em dashes to separate the two, like 4 per side. hope that helps.

darkanitmage:1 last question do u have -----------------‐-------------- in the story bc thay get Annoying when u listening to it
TsuikaLv15

I mean, all the crutch phrases is a big let down as a reader.

Romance_guyLv14

Will he create any organization ?

TrueDawn:none as of yet
TrueDawnAuthor

at some point, yes

Romance_guy:Will he create any organization ?
Other Reviews
TrueDawnAuthor

(This review has been made after I posted Chapter 315.) Hey there. It's been almost six months since I've started writing this novel, so I think it's about due time for me to give another review to this novel from my perspective. Of course, if you take a look at the latest reviews I've gotten, you'd see that a great portion of them say that MC acts incredibly cowardly and newbie-like for someone who has a lot of experience, with some of them even talking about how I rely on a certain phrase a lot of the time (the phrase in question is "could not help but"). From this point onward, there's a possibility that I might spoil a few things about the story, which I would like to apologize in advance for. However, I'll still try my best to not spoil it. First and foremost, let me talk about my reliance on a few key phrases, with the most glaring one you'd find while reading the story is the counter for "could not help but" in the paragraph comments. Then again, there are a few other key phrases I tend to use as a crutch throughout the novel, but let me point out that English is not my first language. Aside from that, I've taken a great portion of the inputs you've given me, which I sincerely appreciate, and have varied my usage of words ever since. From Chapter 200 onwards, rarely has the "could not help but" phrase ever been used. But alas, reviews mentioning it still pop up, so I guess worrying about is useless in the end. Moving on from that, let's talk about the MC's personality at the beginning of the novel. Similar to the active change I've made towards the omission of the usage of certain phrases, I've also taken action towards changing the MC's personality outright at Chapter 115 into something that was more in line with what people expect from someone with a lot of experience. But once again, I still get reviews about how they don't like MC's personality at the beginning and how they call him multiple names under the sun. Believe me when I say I've already taken note of it and that I am planning to rewrite the beginning of the story once I graduate college (which would happen hopefully a few months after I post this review). I'm not oblivious towards MC's personality at the beginning, especially if I know why he acts like that in the first place. In the end, I just wanted to make this review to tell everyone who is reading and who is planning to read this novel a couple of things. For those who have read my novel up to the latest chapter and are continuing to read it, I thank you from the bottom of my heart. And for those who are planning to pick up the book from the title and the synopsis, just keep an open mind. It's part of the reason why I made at least 90 chapters of the novel free, after all. Of course, I'd like it if you get to around Chapter 115 at the very least, but I won't hold it against you if you don't. Once again, I would like to thank everyone who has given me support and constructive criticism of what I've been writing thus far, making me realize that I still have a lot to improve on. I hope you enjoy the journey the novel shall take you on. (This review shall be removed once the beginning of the story has been rewritten to fit the overall narrative better.)

nebulaLv13

Disclaimer- review made at chapter 200 Pretty good so far. Doesn't excel at anything in particular, but very solid in every aspect. writing quality: 4* Good. I mean, there's not much more to say. No glaring issues, decent VSPaG. Not mind-blowing enough for 5 stars, but more than enough for a Webnovel. Story development: 4* Excellent so far. Relatively slow paced, but always interesting and has an overarching plot that is starting to come into play now. Character design: 4* This is a weird one. Sometimes the characters are weird and behave slightly awkwardly compared to previously, while other times I (mentally) squeal in delight due to a surprising but great decision to add a new dimension to a character or give them a closure that they need in a story like this. Overall though, the reason the book scores well despite its inconsistencies is the linking of characters we met previously with new plot points, which works superbly. The obvious example is the MC discovering his new body's past, but other examples include the village leader and the dungeon, as well as one of the MC's quests with the first person he meets after his "reincarnation". updating stability: 5* Honestly just great. I give big props to anyone that can consistently release a chapter a day every day of the week, and doubling that just impresses me further. World background: 4* This is 4* due to the story still being in its nascent stages. What we have seen so far is pretty standard, but interesting nonetheless. We have the growing village, the nearby biomes and other villages leading to a few larger towns, and then a capital city further away with currently unknown expanses on the way. Politically, we know of the crown and the larger families plus a small insight into some of their allies and enemies. At the moment, the monsters are quite underdeveloped background-wise, to the point some readers questioned the morality of killing them, but I at least trust the author has a plan in this aspect. Overall, great read, and I recommend it so far if this genre is your sort of thing. I will try to answer any questions people may have if I see them, and sorry if my review seems too surface-level; in actuality I'm mainly doing this to get to 10 reviews for level for of the comment badge.

Related Stories

Rise of The Undead Legion

Three years ago Conquest was released, redefining virtual reality and gaming. ‘An entire world on a server. Dive in and play the RPG to end all others; explore, create, conquer. LIVE!’ It became an overnight phenomena worldwide. Dave Ruster grew up without a family to speak of, he had few friends and fewer prospects. He lives in the same small town where he graduated from high school, and works long hours at a low-paying job that barely pays for rent and the food on his table. He can’t afford college, but at least he is not out on the streets. His life is going nowhere, stuck on a treadmill. Until chance, karma, or providence, call it whatever you believe in, intervenes. Suddenly, David’s circumstances change. Injured and unable to work, he’s about to lose what little he has. His fate balances where crisis and opportunity go hand in hand. He can risk it all, seizing the opportunity to make circumstances work for him, potentially going further and higher than he ever dreamed. Or he can accept his fate and watch life from the sidelines Join Dave as he puts all his aspirations and hopes, all that he is, into the game he always wanted to play, Conquest! It will be a journey of adventure and discovery, victory and loss, as he strives to create a new future for himself, in-the-game and In Real Life. **** Story is currently being proofed by our Lord Sambraga! (chapters 54+) so please bear with the mediocre quality of writing in the first chaps, it gets much better later on!****

Biako · Games
4.7
564 Chs