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(This review has been made after I posted Chapter 315.) Hey there. It's been almost six months since I've started writing this novel, so I think it's about due time for me to give another review to this novel from my perspective. Of course, if you take a look at the latest reviews I've gotten, you'd see that a great portion of them say that MC acts incredibly cowardly and newbie-like for someone who has a lot of experience, with some of them even talking about how I rely on a certain phrase a lot of the time (the phrase in question is "could not help but"). From this point onward, there's a possibility that I might spoil a few things about the story, which I would like to apologize in advance for. However, I'll still try my best to not spoil it. First and foremost, let me talk about my reliance on a few key phrases, with the most glaring one you'd find while reading the story is the counter for "could not help but" in the paragraph comments. Then again, there are a few other key phrases I tend to use as a crutch throughout the novel, but let me point out that English is not my first language. Aside from that, I've taken a great portion of the inputs you've given me, which I sincerely appreciate, and have varied my usage of words ever since. From Chapter 200 onwards, rarely has the "could not help but" phrase ever been used. But alas, reviews mentioning it still pop up, so I guess worrying about is useless in the end. Moving on from that, let's talk about the MC's personality at the beginning of the novel. Similar to the active change I've made towards the omission of the usage of certain phrases, I've also taken action towards changing the MC's personality outright at Chapter 115 into something that was more in line with what people expect from someone with a lot of experience. But once again, I still get reviews about how they don't like MC's personality at the beginning and how they call him multiple names under the sun. Believe me when I say I've already taken note of it and that I am planning to rewrite the beginning of the story once I graduate college (which would happen hopefully a few months after I post this review). I'm not oblivious towards MC's personality at the beginning, especially if I know why he acts like that in the first place. In the end, I just wanted to make this review to tell everyone who is reading and who is planning to read this novel a couple of things. For those who have read my novel up to the latest chapter and are continuing to read it, I thank you from the bottom of my heart. And for those who are planning to pick up the book from the title and the synopsis, just keep an open mind. It's part of the reason why I made at least 90 chapters of the novel free, after all. Of course, I'd like it if you get to around Chapter 115 at the very least, but I won't hold it against you if you don't. Once again, I would like to thank everyone who has given me support and constructive criticism of what I've been writing thus far, making me realize that I still have a lot to improve on. I hope you enjoy the journey the novel shall take you on. (This review shall be removed once the beginning of the story has been rewritten to fit the overall narrative better.)
Very good book. Read up to 800 chapters. I advise readers to not read the book if you like short arcs or stories as the plots in this book are very detailed and last many chapters. The storyline sets up the plot for the future as every word in the book is intentional and some things may be confusing will have a greater meaning in the future.
Honestly, all I can say about this novel is that the MC is a complete and utter hyper-paranoid idiot. We're constantly told how awesome he is and that he pretty much reached the peak of the game in the past, but he hardly shows it in the novel. He's constantly making himself mediocre so that no one takes a closer look at him yet he doesn't care that the Blacksmith's Guild gets a look at his 1st class and will send it to headquarters? Very inconsistent. He also reacts like a newbie to everything for the sake of the reader and it gets old fast. Also, I get that this is meant to be a VRMMO where the players develop the world, but it feels like all the NPCs have been whacked with the idiot stick a few hundred times. The system also makes virtually no sense in my opinion. It seems like the author ran with the first cool idea he had in his head and didn't bother to think of any of the implications. Only reason the review score isn't lower is because I never reached the current chapter so I have no opinion on the update stability. Honestly, I don't usually read VRMMO novels because I think they usually would suck as games and think they would be better served as isekai/regular LitRPG and this novel did nothing to dissuade me from this dislike. If anyone reading this novel wants to read a story where the MC goes back to the beginning and exploits it for all it's worth in an actual good way, read Night Ranger instead of this.
It's been three months since I've started writing this novel, so now I can tell you more things in this review with greater certainty. Right off the bat, I'm sure you'll notice that this novel's MC is in a similar setting as the one from TLM, being an NPC in a game world. However, that's where the similarities end. I won't tell you much about the entire story, but I can assure you that you won't be disappointed once you pick it up, especially now that I've gotten feedback from you readers, allowing me to polish this story to the next level. To those who are about to start reading the novel, and to those who have stuck with me since the beginning, we're all in for a wild ride. I hope all of you stick with me till the end.
Writing Quality is standard, which sadly most novels fail to reach, with minor mistakes that the author seems to eventually fix/will eventually fix. Can't complain about the stability of updates, with chapters coming out quick and consistently. The story is developing well, it's not as slow as I was dreading but it's not fast either. Good pacing. Character Design is alright, minor issue of the character feeling shallow although I can't precisely pinpoint why that is. Perhaps it's because there is not much history known about the character and he doesn't seem wise so far however the novel is still new, got far to go and development could end up being able to compete with the best of them. World Background is mediocre at best, we so far know there are 2 worlds, 2 villages, 2 cities, a random kingdom the MC isn't in, 2 towns and a forest. We know very little about all of it by chapter 119 but as before the novel is still at the start of everything, it can improve. Sorry for the crude review, not experienced in them, just thought I'd give an honest opinion rather than "5 stars great novel".
Disclaimer- review made at chapter 200 Pretty good so far. Doesn't excel at anything in particular, but very solid in every aspect. writing quality: 4* Good. I mean, there's not much more to say. No glaring issues, decent VSPaG. Not mind-blowing enough for 5 stars, but more than enough for a Webnovel. Story development: 4* Excellent so far. Relatively slow paced, but always interesting and has an overarching plot that is starting to come into play now. Character design: 4* This is a weird one. Sometimes the characters are weird and behave slightly awkwardly compared to previously, while other times I (mentally) squeal in delight due to a surprising but great decision to add a new dimension to a character or give them a closure that they need in a story like this. Overall though, the reason the book scores well despite its inconsistencies is the linking of characters we met previously with new plot points, which works superbly. The obvious example is the MC discovering his new body's past, but other examples include the village leader and the dungeon, as well as one of the MC's quests with the first person he meets after his "reincarnation". updating stability: 5* Honestly just great. I give big props to anyone that can consistently release a chapter a day every day of the week, and doubling that just impresses me further. World background: 4* This is 4* due to the story still being in its nascent stages. What we have seen so far is pretty standard, but interesting nonetheless. We have the growing village, the nearby biomes and other villages leading to a few larger towns, and then a capital city further away with currently unknown expanses on the way. Politically, we know of the crown and the larger families plus a small insight into some of their allies and enemies. At the moment, the monsters are quite underdeveloped background-wise, to the point some readers questioned the morality of killing them, but I at least trust the author has a plan in this aspect. Overall, great read, and I recommend it so far if this genre is your sort of thing. I will try to answer any questions people may have if I see them, and sorry if my review seems too surface-level; in actuality I'm mainly doing this to get to 10 reviews for level for of the comment badge.
skip the first ~45 chapters. if you've read the legendary mechanic + any vr gaming novel you'll pretty much know all the explained concepts and the storie really kicks off with the beast tide in chapter 45 so you should be fine. the pacing in the beginning is pretty bad since the author explains everything for complete genre newbies which is fine but boring for vets. aside from that i think this story could become very good it's currently to early to say (chapter 100) since the players haven't yet arrived nor have we explored the universe but i have some faith in the author he has demonstrated some skill in previous works so we should be fine. mc likes hiding his powerlevels so be ware of that although this too seems to become less egregious as we get deeper into the story. don't let this review stop you from reading the story but i had to take of some stars for the rough start. The English is excellent.
I could not help but be a bit disappointed by this novel. It felt so good at first, but I could not help but notice that he feels like a complete noob at times, when he was supposed to be a pro who survived until the end. I also could not help but notice that in the first chapter, it was mentioned that he could rememeber anything if he just focused on it. I could not help but notice that he seemed oblivious to things that he should rememeber, or atleast have an idea of. An example being when he retrieved the pain relief pills through the menu. He was shocked they materialized infront of him, when after literal years of gameplay, he should have known that would happen for NPC’s. I could not help but notice that the technology tree seems highly limiting.
I’m really liking this so far. hope the author keeps it up
This book is terrible and amazing. It makes me want to read more, and I can't stop. The problem is that at chapter 89+, everything is locked, and I can't continually read. I can only unlock 2, maybe 3, every day. This is killing me. Is there a way for me to catch up and then use fast pass. My friends got hooked on this, too.
Bloodlines Online, a game world where only those who learn to play can actually prosper. With a realistic skill leveling system and a deeply fleshed out system for handling statistics every player must learn that they either develop their skills or they fall behind. Ezekiel is a young man barely approaching graduation and working at his uncle's restaurant, The Chateau. Like many others he chose to buy Bloodlines Online just to explore a new game in the revolutionary field but just like every other player he was unaware of the significant role this game would play in the future. Streaming, currency exchange, information, all sorts of methods to make money on Bloodlines would soon rear their head and anyone who had even a small advantage could soon rise to glory. Will you rise through the honor of raiding dungeons to sell information? Will you gain wealth by selling your services as a power leveling carry? Will you become a wealthy entrepreneur in the game? Blacksmithing, alchemy, enchanting, class unique boons, all of it will become a players easily obtained income. The game hides a terrible secret though, a secret known to another player named Alexander. Follow the path of Bloodlines Online whether you wish to learn magic, martial skills or simply like the characters, it is all up to you. I do not own the cover art used and if the creator would like me to remove it i will do so.
Legendary player Marvin transmigrated to the eve of the Great Calamity. This was the end of the fourth era, all gods joined hands to destroy the Universe Magic Pool. The fourth Fate Tablet had begun maturing and all gods, demons, legends, devils, liches, dragons and other legendary creatures were appearing one after the other. In order to protect his loved ones, Marvin has no other choice but to delve into the shadows. This is the story of a young ranger growing into the Ruler of the Night during the Chaos Era. _________________________ TL: After transmigrating into a weak noble body, Marvin discovered that he was familiar with the world, this was the game he played in his previous life and... Damn! He only had six months before the Great Calamity! As a former top player, he would obviously fight to save the world... Yeah, no. Time to plan and prepare for the upcoming events, better to use that knowledge to get ahead rather than fight with gods. Follow Marvin's journey through this new world.
Bracelet of Immortality, the mysterious sealed item that needed 26 fragments to completely unseal. Every unsealing giving an incredible power to the user. First Fragment, the power of Time. Second Fragment, the Power of healing. Third Fragment, the power of... What happens when Ryder Flynn finds the item inside the first Fully Immersive VRMMO. Why did the item follow him to the real world? Why is the Virtual World so real? **** A human-like System that knows too much? Why does it feel like my family member? Is it related to my strange memories? The System used to annoy me so much with its threatening quests but why is it that now I feel each of his quest saved me and my loved one indirectly? **** The memories of the past? Why do I remember being a god that created this bracelet? Why did I want to destroy everything. What did the other gods do? **** ... Instagram: @Author_demonic_angel ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Buy me a coffee and support me on Ko-fi: https://ko-fi.com/deangel Patreon: Patreon.com/DeAngel Join my discord:https://discord.gg/2AGkydg ______________________________________ PS: I don't own the cover artwork. All rights of the cover belong to the Original artist. I wasn't able to find the artist. If you are the artist, you can contact me.
Li Xiaonian dies as a result of his girlfriend's betrayal. Luckily, he has the chance to start all over again and is reborn with a mysterious space battleship he accidentally acquired in his previous life—"Shadow". Returning to the virtual online game "Star Wind' that everyone is crazy about, he finds himself to be a little different in this life. The gift "Shadow" bestowed on him this time turns out to be Memory Instillation. With this gift, it only takes him a moment to master any kind of skill. Ding... System: You've acquired primary shooting skills and gained 10 years of shooting experience. System: you've acquired mechanical modification technology and gained 10 years of mechanical assembly experience. Playing the game, unconsciously, Li Xiaonian has become a zillionaire and a man of great wisdom in the real world.
An alien civilization invades, prompting a global Spirit Power Awakening, with a new game arising to combat the alien civilization... What? All transactions in-game can only be conducted using spiritual energy coins? Without spending a large sum, it's impossible to quickly improve your strength? Standing next to the largest Spiritual Spring Eye in the world, Su Yu reveals a smile. I have ten billion spiritual energy coins! Are you scared? ...... PS: I have a completed old book with 1.6 million words, it’s a testament to my credibility.
The Super-Dimensional Game has descended upon Blue Star. Everyone can enter the game and obtain a World Fragment, becoming a deity and leading their tribe to conquer all directions, even conquering the alternate world. Fortunately, Logan, who transmigrated here, has a Drop System. Whether it's him or his subordinates, they can all receive drops after victory. [Log: Your believers have defeated the wolf pack. Drop: Bond—"Wolf Pack"] [Log: Your believers have defeated the Sun Elves. Drop: Bloodline—"Child of the Sun"] [Log: Your believers have defeated the Wild Angels. Drop: Primal Divinity!] [Log: Your believers have defeated the Void Evil God. Drop:...] Starting from the lowest bloodline quality Goblin, Logan embarks on a path of dominance filled with blood and fire.
Good news! The game is up and running! Bad news, while other players play the game, I get played by the game. Bai E had reserved "Galaxy Online" only to find himself turned into cannon fodder artificial human within the game world. High-dimensional demons, endless swarms of insects, the crisis of intelligent machinery... Universal pests running rampant, and Bai E even has to face a fourth catastrophe—players. Confronted with these things, even the soul won't find peace after death. Finding a place to bury oneself first seems like the most prudent way to die. Wait, what's this? 【Lucky Strike: Tenfold critical hit, maxed drop rate, a single strike for 999! Current charge: 100/100 (Note: Equipment depends entirely on drops, free trade for all.)】 Bai E: "Initially, I refused to struggle for survival in this crisis-filled Galaxy World, but then I gave it a try, wow! The drop rate is really high!" (PS: Players who have been cut by the leek can also have a process they are passionate about. Come play a game, protagonists, players, us...) ```
Shin Kinghad is a kid that had been abducted and trained by a powerful underworld organization since he was three years old. After six years, he was rescued by the Special Forces during their operation against that organization and was adopted by the captain of the Special Forces. Since then, he treated the son and daughter of the captain as his own brother and sister. Years later, he joins the greatest VRMMORPG of all time, [Destiny's Fate] online, due to repeated invitations from his brother. He creates havoc inside the game as he climbs his way from being a beginner player to a peak class expert. But as he grew up, he became curious about his real identity and his biological parents. He tried to investigate it with the help of his brother and best friend. And after discovering his real background, he decided to follow in his father’s footsteps and stood at the peak of the world using his Martial-Art Skills and Mentalism Techniques.