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Demons_and_I
Demons_and_IAuthor1yr
2023-08-28 18:58

Greetings and Salutations... 🧐So there wasn't a lot of activity this month, but I promise next month, I won't fail to deliver every single day. If there are any questions you have about 'God Ash' feel free to drop them down here. I'll answer to the best fo my abilities...I'd like to get as much feedback from you guys as possible...TNX

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Sinful_Cyanide
Sinful_CyanideLv15

Is there any yuri in this novel?

Demons_and_I
Demons_and_IAuthor

No...

Sinful_Cyanide:Is there any yuri in this novel?
Demons_and_I
Demons_and_IAuthor

But you can read to find out...

Sinful_Cyanide:Is there any yuri in this novel?
Savvy_Scribbler
Savvy_ScribblerLv10

how many in the harem?

Demons_and_I
Demons_and_IAuthor

Depends... It isn't a focal point of the story. 🌚

Savvy_Scribbler:how many in the harem?
DaoistWUkfmv
DaoistWUkfmvLv12

Could you please update the discord link?

Demons_and_I:Depends... It isn't a focal point of the story. 🌚
batonhiss
batonhissLv3

are you copying blood warlock system?

Demons_and_I
Demons_and_IAuthor

No, not at all. I've read Blood Warlock, and while i did like the start, I think it fell off drastically. So my book might share a few similarities as they are both have the system genre. But no, I am not copying Blood Warlock :)

batonhiss:are you copying blood warlock system?
Zi_Zaa
Zi_ZaaLv1

Disc link bro

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McWms99
McWms99Lv2

So firstly I just wanna state that this is actually a good novel, could even be great. I have issues with a few things though. 1stly too much exposition, way too much exposition. This novel could actually benefit from breaking up and expanding the first few chapters to flush out more intricate details and better character development and such. I feel as though the Author loves this novel and has a great many ideas he wants to implement and it shows by coming off as if he's rushing the development of the story. There's a distinct difference between withholding information and slowly trickling it in after hooking the reader with great action beats and giving information dumps to get critical information out of the way. There are some grammar errors as well as spelling flaws, but by far the biggest issue is the exposition. Sometimes it even rips the reader out of immersion of the story. We gain information that could easily be told to us in more creative ways. Overall the author is creative and even though this is a systems novel, I feel they do a great job of utilizing it as a tool rather than the main focus. The main focus is the world, and there's thought put into this world, which is why the exposition drives me up a wall because you are taking away from truly expanding the beauty of the world. I know this may seem like a rant or bashing but I'm only being tough because you gotta gem here, slow down and polish that baby. If you establish that beginning right all that juicy tid bits i know your rushing to get to will pay off even more.

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