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2024-11-08 05:16

The Main issue is the grammar, its hard to read, use grammarly or A.I. to correct the grammar. Then there is to much explanation, its takes to long when it can be explained properly in shorter time so there is much time for the adventure story part, and ita supposed to be a dungeon so the story should have more story about the dungeons adventure part. But over all if you get past the grammar, its an ok story

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