harrisdavidwilliam

wahahahha,,, this is funny as heck,,,, the writer is really good at this[img=recommend]

The Main issue is the grammar, its hard to read, use grammarly or A.I. to correct the grammar. Then there is to much explanation, its takes to long when it can be explained properly in shorter time so there is much time for the adventure story part, and ita supposed to be a dungeon so the story should have more story about the dungeons adventure part. But over all if you get past the grammar, its an ok story

it is readable, but the problem is the name of the spell and the name if the magical animals are wrong, like the invisible animal, its seems like its a demiguise, also the transformation magic, the right one is transfiguration, also the phantasm shift isnt it apparition, he even named an acramantula spider as an eight eyed giant spider, even some of the magical plant named are wrong

this clearly needs editing, it tts readable but there are chinese words still specially when it comes to the names, sometimes its on chinese, plus the translation on the magical spells are clearly wrong,,, this will just add to the confusion specially to those who like reading harry potter ff