As of chapter 5 Too much details, not enough adventuring, let the characters discover the dungeon with the reader. Otherwise a good concept
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Thanks for the advice. It's just that for the first part it is devoted to some explanations about this dungeon and the information itself is general in nature and must be introduced to adventurers. Later, in the dungeon there will be many missions such as puzzle missions and various other missions. Well, just wait. It will definitely be interesting in the future. Although it will take a long time to update if it reaches that stage because it takes time to think about the storyline.
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the updates take to long to let the story flow. every chapter is way to indepth especially with common sense, most readers of ff are familiar with dungeon stories and other mechanics of the story. it reads more like a character sheet for a d&d.
