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Lord_Hallow
Lord_HallowLv142yr
2022-11-18 04:07

The novel is written well. I understand the authors need to make it dark and realistic, but it honestly comes off as the MC constantly getting kicked while he is down. The need to overcome limitless is all swell and good, but there is really not much character development for the MC. A good novel has many ups and downs to keep the reader engaged and from what i have read so far, this is just downs. I applaud you for the quality of your writing, but for as well as this is written it doesn’t make you want to come back for more. Especially once the reader realizes they will have to wait 80 chapters until the MC stops getting wrecked by fate and his artifically poor luck. True, no one wants to see a Gary Stu where everything goes right all the time, but please remember that that opposite Is true as well. It doesnt matter how strong he is if it becomes a drag it read.

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VQuintessence
VQuintessenceAuthor

You're right. My previous novels all had OP MCs that faced little to no difficulty, so I wanted to try something different, but I guess I went too far, I made it too dark without any light in the distance, so I understand why it can be a little frustrating. I will learn from this and do better in the future, so thank you for the review.

Maximus_Demon
Maximus_DemonLv13

Thanks for letting me know, i hate stories like that.

Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

I just wrote a 1,8-Star Review for this Novel. I know, not really what he deserves considering his previous Stories and his general Talent for writing, but the Logic in this one was as low as his Luck. With his Luck Stat he shouldn't even be alive at this point. This and other factors make the Novel unreadable because of the Unrealism of it all. Good Review tho. I took it a bit too subjective ...maybe, but sometimes only the harsh truth will change the mind...or not, we will see.

Litlle_Penguin
Litlle_PenguinLv4

I didn't read novel itself but why you think 'dark' = beaten mc? Novel can be dark even when mc strongest being. Overly beaten mc not dark but obvious author's fetish... just immersion breaker.

VQuintessence:You're right. My previous novels all had OP MCs that faced little to no difficulty, so I wanted to try something different, but I guess I went too far, I made it too dark without any light in the distance, so I understand why it can be a little frustrating. I will learn from this and do better in the future, so thank you for the review.
theonepieceisreal
theonepieceisrealLv4

Tbh once you treat the start as a comedy, it gets much more enjoyable to read. The MC keeps suffering and suffering and the result of the countdown was so absurd it pretty much made me burst out laughing.

Insta_username
Insta_usernameLv2

You might think that maybe because you binge read it, i binge read it too and found if quite funny. But later when i was reading the novel on daily updates it became cringe for sometime when he was constantly beaten but now mc is strong as a yonko so everythings fine again

theonepieceisreal:Tbh once you treat the start as a comedy, it gets much more enjoyable to read. The MC keeps suffering and suffering and the result of the countdown was so absurd it pretty much made me burst out laughing.
notlair
notlairLv5

guys anyone here who can summarize the events up to ch 80? i read up to the point mc lost his arm and i lost motivation to read, I'd like to know if this story got better later on

Riekoo
RiekooLv4

I just checked and bruh you're a legend I read both your novels before this and they were peak especially the hxh one

VQuintessence:You're right. My previous novels all had OP MCs that faced little to no difficulty, so I wanted to try something different, but I guess I went too far, I made it too dark without any light in the distance, so I understand why it can be a little frustrating. I will learn from this and do better in the future, so thank you for the review.
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