Lord_Hallow

He has aura now he can literally understand pokemon. Nothing subtle about the bond. Also where’s riolu? I understand the use of ai to write these days, but the issue with that is that ai hyper focuses and doesn’t account for background details from earlier parts of the story.

No mention of or conversation with pidgeot at all?

He summoned the Riolu with the ticket… I would edit this part to reflect that.

The story isn’t bad and the concept is great. Just some feedback. If you are using ai for grammar and whatnot, just double check sentence length and naming convention. Otherwise great job.

Is this AI? He already said in the part 1 of this chapter that they had left the outer regions. The repetition, run in sentences, and weird naming is feeling very clanker-esque to me.

Divine impact?

Still no aura?

Choice specs would lock them into a move when carried.

Is he not going to awaken his aura? I understand that it may effect the outside world, but it will make his stay here muuuuuuuch safer

I want to say the kid is Giovanni but that depends on the version