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Poseidonz
PoseidonzLv12yr
2022-10-17 00:24

As of chapter 14: This will be more of a suggestion and advice than a review, so take from it what you want. I like Yovan. He seems a bit wild, I'd be curious to see how he would end up evolving in a world like One piece. Also, I think I can trust you with making his abilities special and complex like you did with your HxH fanfic. You did phenomenal there, so hopefully, you do the same here because I'm curious how broken abilities can be under Yovan. This is a suggestion, you should build tension and make us readers feel something because you didn't do that with your DC fanfic. It was a different kind of novel, I understand and it was amazing, but I think building tension would be much better. Lastly, good luck and keep up the good work. I will post a full review when there are more chapters or something of significance happens.

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jake_lockley
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Did he regenerate his arms?

Enlightened_Clown
Enlightened_ClownLv4

I don't want tention, I got many tentions in life. If you really want it you can borrow from me permanently

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