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2023-09-03 03:52

reason i like 1. a story about Mahabharat2. a story about Karan 3. a story of many legendary figures .4. changing the story5. changing the fate of many unfortunate peoples .6. I'm bored 😒7. i liked when MC misunderstood something and do over the top things. it gives the feeling of "The Eminence in Shadow" ** what i hate**1.. changing the history but since its a fanfic i don't care even if it make me uncomfortable .but it cost money so it's not a fanfic 2. if you are writing it in English then why bother with so many Hindi and Sanskrit words . just use father , mother instead of pitashree .. ( use Hindi words in moderation that actually means something .3 . I like story and side story also some details but ... you have straching it too much . explaining simple things twice and thrice too much .4 . story pace is to slow and chapters are small .a single chapter is worthless for a single scenario you are using multiple chapters 5. paid chapter start too early and these small chapters cost 2 fp. it forces you to go pirate . 6. there are too many legendary figures and too many epic storyline so why bother with harem nonsense .7 . you streched the fact about his troublesome harem life , harem fight , jealousy , raising the flags or what not . why.... ????he is in ancient times where harem is common for a king so why trouble us with useless things .you could add some fun and little drama in chapters but no .. you are wasting tons of chapter for his harem that is not even started yet. why... in ancient times more than 5000 years ago, and this reincarnated guy can't handle harem of little girls . why...?Google says krishna has more than 16107 wife .8. why on the earth a Star child blood line bans Harem,.. for what reason . it shouldn't even mention harem in first place . you could just say that his soul is from kalyug so it encourages or discourage the harem , why blood line .....? 9. some time author looks more biased than Bisham

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bro is trying to make evil look good . I think you should have done more research. your novel is all about praising karna and degrading Krishna and pandava,you have to know that yudhisthira never become the king of hastinapur , arjuna created a kingdom called indrapasth for his elder brother even in mahabharata yuddha they wanted was indrapastha not hastinapur , in ch 47 you cursed kunti for the death of 6 people but not said anything about kaurava who had put the fire on lakshgrih you got effect of kali on your mind. let me tell youduryodhana was incarnation of kali , karna was reincarnation of a demon who was killed by Nar -Narayana (arjuna krishna) he had the boon of 10,000 armor and out of them 9,999 was destroyed by nar(arjun) karna was reincarnated with remaining one armor. It's OK if you are fan of karna I also like his kindness but you literally had made him god like , many say karna is surya putra so he is prince of celestial bodies but as indra putra arjuna is prince of deva, he even rejected the chance to be in swarga lok for his elder brother , if arjun or pandava knew karna was his elder brother they would never go against him. karna was killed for his sin of participation in abhimanyu death . Arjuna had pashupatatra that can easily destroy earth and you think he can't destroy an armor. (It was my opinion your novel your wish , but I can't see people choosing good over evil, you are fan of karna, I am fan of arjuna you had your frustration I got my frustration after reading your fan fiction , if my word hurted you then I am sorry but all I had spoken is fact you can't deny it karna was paying for his karm of previous life and was earning the karma in dwapar yug arjun also got punished for every mistake he did and he accepted it not denied like other )

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