Ahhh! I love this story! It has so much potential! Ahhh and this new arc. Please don’t rush over this arc! It has so much potential, (write at minimum 20 chapters here) can’t we get Mavis pov. I’m sure you can write dozens of chapters here. Like what was Mavis doing before she found our MC, what has she experience, was she happy or sad, what is her dream and her thoughts. You write as if we know the story already ( we don’t), and don’t want to change it. I was really upset when the MC decided to go to sleep for hundred of years. That was lazy writing, the MC is suppose to have a loving mother persona , how can she just abandon her children for hundreds of years? I let it slide since dragons are known to love sleeping but you could have at least have the MC visit her children before going to sleep. Remember that this is your story, you can change the plot, you shouldn’t rush while writing, flesh the story out more. From what I’ve read so far, you have good writing skills but you’re a bit to lazy for the side character development. Overall I really enjoy reading this story, keep up the great work!
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LIKEThanks for the feedback! I really need to work on the secondary point of view issue, but about her going to sleep, it wasn't her choice. Everything that happened before she woke up in the lake was a configuration of memories created by the world itself because Tiamat's existence didn't exist there in the first place. Basically, the real Tiamat first appeared in this lake, but to others in this world, Tiamat has existed forever. This will be explored later, but that's basically it.
the others in fairy tail world*