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2024-01-20 09:28

In addition to what I consider to be common errors in this genre (lack of depth in character personality in general, rushed events in a short period of time) I think what most disappoints is that it's not really kingdom building, I mean the MC just leaves out there dominating territories and plays into the hands of his "subjects" to administer, there is no type of discussion about choosing territory for construction, economic and food problems faced. Basically another "Lord of People" with op mc without any depth in general

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