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2024-01-20 09:28

In addition to what I consider to be common errors in this genre (lack of depth in character personality in general, rushed events in a short period of time) I think what most disappoints is that it's not really kingdom building, I mean the MC just leaves out there dominating territories and plays into the hands of his "subjects" to administer, there is no type of discussion about choosing territory for construction, economic and food problems faced. Basically another "Lord of People" with op mc without any depth in general

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-There are numerous typos in the story and the author often forgets plots that he himself defined. Things like a character appearing at the same time in two different places, the author copying and pasting a notification and forgetting to edit it, or even forgetting some effect of the protagonist's main skills. The author puts so much information and so many skills that he can't manage his own story. -The distance from the world makes no sense, sometimes the author shows the protagonist traveling to a certain location kilometers away with an army of thousands of soldiers and this march takes only a few hours, when in fact it should take days or weeks. -The protagonist accumulates countless useless skills that he never uses. And the skills are so scattered and random that it's evident the author didn't plan anything. -The protagonist's main class is the martial artist, but he has never fought a single opponent in 200 chapters and none of his skills have to do with his class. And even if "classes" exist in history, it is possible to learn skills that have nothing to do with the character class. -The drop system is broken and makes no sense, putting things like 0% drop just to conveniently work with the protagonist's talent: 100% drop rate. If the drop is 0% this item simply shouldn't exist. -The protagonist accumulates countless items with his 100% drop talent, but these items are so large in quantity that they just gather dust and are never used efficiently. (Like protagonist's skills) -The loyalty system makes no sense, literally, people are only loyal to the protagonist because of a talent that forces these people to become loyal, It has nothing to do with the protagonist's effort. They are like slaves with brainwashing. -No death consequences in battles. The protagonist has countless soldiers, but because of his talent he manages to revive them all whenever a battle takes place, so all soldiers are essentially immortal. In the end, I had fun reading the first few chapters, but after 200 chapters I got bored and felt like it wasn't worth it. (And I feel that the novel is written by AI)

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