Hi guys, I keep asking for it but I hope you all can give this novel a chance! Also if you have any advice to improve my writing, pleasplease tell me as I want to improve too myself. (●￣(工)￣●)

I'm just here to give a review, though I can't say much about your work as not much happened yet, though I'll say it's interesting to read and you're doing good being a firstimer :>

writing quality isn't the worst but far bellow the standards of what the rating of the book would suggest, basically reviews seem lil fake 😅 honestly just barely better than some mtl novels that webnovel puts out. story development is very weird at times, there is no pace to it, stuff just happens without a good reason, basically a lot of forced plots just because you as the author can do it i guess. I guess it's due to being an inexperienced author and it's hard to make that plot development seem more natural you, idk... probably know about this problem yourself. characters are honestly bad... like they aren't even budget author pov's copies, copies so bad that it's insulting to the originals. Ye I said it, might seem harsh but that's the reality of things, you have 30+ reviews telling you how good the book is, but it's not.... not even close. the idea it self is good but execution is way off I could go in deeper but I won't lol, maybe will check this book out again in the far future and write another review 🥱

Its actually kinda good, love the synopis, love the character development, its a good book with great potential[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

Probably one of the best novel, i read. I love the character as he kinda have relatable trait with me or even with other. While the system is good too, remind me of Raphael in Tensura (slime). But, talking about the writing style, this is surprisingly simple but caught all the detail i need. adding this into my collections, couldn't wait you update it, i just read 4 but i will do it more later. Good luck author!

This ls actually good novel good story and good character development all of it, definitely recommend this novel and as a newbie creating a novel might as well use this too see and improve on how to write and do things when writing novel.

Amazing story, Cool character and wonderful system. The setting and the plot is a good deal. Also the story started with a good thriller 💕. This novel surpassed my expectations. Keep writing

I had a lot of fun reading the first 15 chapters(will make a new review once there are more). For starter’s the mc isn’t an edge lord or psychopath freak, just a smart and collected guy who likes the charm stat. Mc finally doesn’t use a cliche weapon and is also to look cool doing it. for world background and carachter design, it could be better , with more descriptions and depth, but just the Mc makes the story worthwhile. 5 stars!.

What a beautiful story. This storyline is intriguing. This book has a lot of potential and great characters. Keep writing. Keep up the good work. 🙂👍👍