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Incognito0001
Incognito0001Lv132yr
2022-09-30 00:03

writing quality isn't the worst but far bellow the standards of what the rating of the book would suggest, basically reviews seem lil fake 😅 honestly just barely better than some mtl novels that webnovel puts out. story development is very weird at times, there is no pace to it, stuff just happens without a good reason, basically a lot of forced plots just because you as the author can do it i guess. I guess it's due to being an inexperienced author and it's hard to make that plot development seem more natural you, idk... probably know about this problem yourself. characters are honestly bad... like they aren't even budget author pov's copies, copies so bad that it's insulting to the originals. Ye I said it, might seem harsh but that's the reality of things, you have 30+ reviews telling you how good the book is, but it's not.... not even close. the idea it self is good but execution is way off I could go in deeper but I won't lol, maybe will check this book out again in the far future and write another review 🥱

The Extra's Dominance

Drei05
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142 Chs

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Drei05
Drei05Author

Thanks for the review and I would keep in mind what you said so I can improve the story :3

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Drei05
Drei05Author

Also, I'm not trying to insult the novels I've inspired my work from. I am doing my best, and I just lack the talent they have, sorry if it appears to you that way (●´⌓`●)

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Incognito0001
Incognito0001Lv13

ye I might have been a little bit harsh, but moving forward I recommend focusing more on the basics like grammar/char design/plot progression and maybe revisit older chapters and at least improve the grammar. if you are using this novel as a way to improve your skills then 1/ chap a day isn't really necessary, focus on quality over quantity and if anything create an amazing second book 😅idk the ideas are clearly there, just need to work on that execution, I know writing is 100 times harder than reading and I am not trying to trample on your effort if that's how my review looked like, I just got a lil annoyed because the idea was there, exactly the genre I love reading but just was off... idk keep it up, hard work usually pays off if you grind long enough

Drei05:Thanks for the review and I would keep in mind what you said so I can improve the story :3
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Drei05
Drei05Author

Thanks :3 I'm actually planning to re edit my early chaps as that were really the time I don't know anything abt writing :3 And I get what you mean, I like reading too so I would probably feel the same :3

Incognito0001:ye I might have been a little bit harsh, but moving forward I recommend focusing more on the basics like grammar/char design/plot progression and maybe revisit older chapters and at least improve the grammar. if you are using this novel as a way to improve your skills then 1/ chap a day isn't really necessary, focus on quality over quantity and if anything create an amazing second book 😅idk the ideas are clearly there, just need to work on that execution, I know writing is 100 times harder than reading and I am not trying to trample on your effort if that's how my review looked like, I just got a lil annoyed because the idea was there, exactly the genre I love reading but just was off... idk keep it up, hard work usually pays off if you grind long enough
2yr
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MynameisDante
MynameisDanteLv11

W author right here

Drei05:Thanks :3 I'm actually planning to re edit my early chaps as that were really the time I don't know anything abt writing :3 And I get what you mean, I like reading too so I would probably feel the same :3
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Drei05
Drei05Author

MynameisDante:W author right here
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Drei05
Drei05Author

Everyone thanks for the support! Expect thay I will try my best to make the story even better. Also, if you have any thought about my work, just comment it! I honestly enjoy and feel happy reading other's comment to my novel! And please if you can, I would really appreciate if you leave a honest review about my work. ⊂(￣(ｴ)￣)⊃

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Drei05
Drei05Author

Hi guys, I keep asking for it but I hope you all can give this novel a chance! Also if you have any advice to improve my writing, pleasplease tell me as I want to improve too myself. (●￣(工)￣●)

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BloodyCale
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I'm just here to give a review, though I can't say much about your work as not much happened yet, though I'll say it's interesting to read and you're doing good being a firstimer :>

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Little_North_Star
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Its actually kinda good, love the synopis, love the character development, its a good book with great potential[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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zawkey
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Probably one of the best novel, i read. I love the character as he kinda have relatable trait with me or even with other. While the system is good too, remind me of Raphael in Tensura (slime). But, talking about the writing style, this is surprisingly simple but caught all the detail i need. adding this into my collections, couldn't wait you update it, i just read 4 but i will do it more later. Good luck author!

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TheGreatGuy
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This ls actually good novel good story and good character development all of it, definitely recommend this novel and as a newbie creating a novel might as well use this too see and improve on how to write and do things when writing novel.

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faithanna_justin32
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Amazing story, Cool character and wonderful system. The setting and the plot is a good deal. Also the story started with a good thriller 💕. This novel surpassed my expectations. Keep writing

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BASTILLE
BASTILLELv13

I had a lot of fun reading the first 15 chapters(will make a new review once there are more). For starter’s the mc isn’t an edge lord or psychopath freak, just a smart and collected guy who likes the charm stat. Mc finally doesn’t use a cliche weapon and is also to look cool doing it. for world background and carachter design, it could be better , with more descriptions and depth, but just the Mc makes the story worthwhile. 5 stars!.

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big_nono
big_nonoLv1

What a beautiful story. This storyline is intriguing. This book has a lot of potential and great characters. Keep writing. Keep up the good work. 🙂👍👍

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