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DoaistDownstairs
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2022-09-29 02:29

New favorite. I hope author doesn't drop it or I'll cry

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It's not going to be everyone's cup of tea, so I won't lie and say it's the best novel on this site. Give it a read, if you aren't interested in the first ten chapters then you probably won't fully immerse. However, I must say it was worthwhile writing this, so I'm sure it's going to be worthwhile for some of you to read this as well. Review: World Background: As of now not much about the world has been explored as it is still very early into the plot. Though I have plans of creating a massive world with its own history and politics, we will have to wait and see if I have the ability to deliver. Writing Quality: Though I speak English often, I am not a native speaker. That's to say, my writing is readable, but not impeccable. However, I don't believe that it takes much from the quality of the story, but you will notice a few errors here and there. Story Development: The pacing is rather on the slow side, though it is to be expected with the type of story I am trying to create. As of now, not much has happened in the plot, but it is indeed beginning to thicken, Character Design: I try my best to give my characters depth, and though it does not show now. I have already set the foundations for future character growth and hence dimension. Overall an average story told by an average author. Though you would do well not to assume you have any clue whatsoever where my novel is heading. The media I consume is vastly different from that on this site, and my end game will go in a different direction from most third-rate work that is devoured here. Happy reading.

Lol1san
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This novel can be summarized in one word: 'boring'. People might think that being a leafling, constantly evolving and slowly getting stronger is fun. Even I thought so at first and I admired the idea and the way the author wrote it, but as it progressed I realized that I didn't enjoy what I was reading at all. To me, this novel is just a copy of slime anime, the reincarnated slime Rimuru, except that Mc goes around training soldiers and playing sergeant. The difference is that he always trains leaflings with low IQ and shares the advantages and knowledge of his system with them. Other than that, it is a similar kingdom building novel. I don't know why it was fun for some people to see him training his little army down to the smallest detail, but for me it was not worth reading. In the same way, it is pointless to try to make another leafling as strong as him in every evolution. These are creatures at the bottom of the power ladder of the world background. You might think that the only advantage of training them would be long term loyalty but that is a big NO. As a former soldier or agent, Mc is too soft on them. In one chapter a leafling was kicking him in the face and he was just indifferent. At least if you are building your own army you have to make them fear and respect for you. It doesn't have to be all of them always like "Yes, Sir!" to you but what's the point if you don't want to keep them under your power and make them follow your orders? To me it was a boring MC. It's too early to talk about world building as the pace of the story is slow. But he and his 'cheat' are completely pointless. If at the end of the story a leafling who starts from the same level as him - from the bottom - will be at the same power level as him and be disrespectful to him, why should I read this sergeant role play novel ?

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