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Dark_knight234
Dark_knight234Lv132yr
2022-08-15 16:25

nice story by the way a really great read the beginning is lacking behind a little but it only gets better from there I'm surprised the novel has only 3 votes if recommend this novel any day good work author

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PRO_GAMER_2345
PRO_GAMER_2345Author

Thanks for your review, the thing about the beginning is that I needed to slowly explain the world and take the story up from there. That's why it feels lacking.

JRCaste
JRCasteLv4

hey there Author, I see the tags and I assume your novel is a Harem? right?

PRO_GAMER_2345:Thanks for your review, the thing about the beginning is that I needed to slowly explain the world and take the story up from there. That's why it feels lacking.
PRO_GAMER_2345
PRO_GAMER_2345Author

Yes it is a harem but not too big. Four or five women. Also, I will make it slowly as the story progresses. I would not be putting with women here and there and calling it a harem.

JRCaste:hey there Author, I see the tags and I assume your novel is a Harem? right?
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Syler_Blade
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126 chapter review!!! Warning, possible spoilers!!! First things first, I would like to point out that “overall” the author has done a pretty decent job with this novel and hope he/she continues what they started. With that being said, I have compliled a small list of pros and cons as of chapter 126. Pros: + The writing, for the most part, is fairly well done. + The auther is has been uploading chapters regularly(roughly 5 or so chapters a week at the time of writing this). + So far the story has not stalled and has continued to move forward towards the issues as stated in the summery of the book. + The “World background” foundation is laid and definitely should be able to provide quite a bit of material for the author to build off of. + Starting at around chapter 100ish the auther starts to build the other minor character backgrounds, which I feel helps to add value to the book. CONS: (As with all webnovels, there are flaws and minor issue but I will only list the two biggest ones I see so far.) - So far 0% romance and/or harem at all. This may not be a con to everyone but the book has the “romance” and “harem” tags and it kinda feels like a lie when it seems like 150+ chapters could pass before romance is seen at all. I will say that there has been small hints of interest from possible heroines. - Character development. This is a big one for me. Sure the mc has grown physically more powerful using the system but as a person he has not grown at all. And to make matters worse, there is a huge disconnect between who he is internally and who he is externally. He is needy and childlike with his thoughts and with the system; while at the same time, somehow, he’s an above average, powerful team leader that orders others around like an experienced veteran that has all the answers. Everyone has that thing that bothers them when reading and this is mine, it has made me put the book down mid chapter before and not finish till the next day. Hope this helps potential readers to make a decision, and overall I think it’s a good book with the potential to be a great one depending on character development and how the author handles the harem issue(when it comes).

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