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BludKratz
BludKratzLv132yr
2022-12-07 08:15

SPOILERS BELOW!!!!!!! Well I enjoy the premise of the story and I quite like Samuel as a character. However I feel it would have been better for him to wait awhile to atleast settle down and actually enjoy having a “father”&”mother” etc. In the first 30 chapters alone he’s gone from being blind to adopted to straight publishing a book now talking about starting a company, it feels very rushed especially considering he’s only been adopted for 1-3months (inc mini timeskip’s) that’s also not considering the fact he’s 10 years old. Well just thought I’d give my opinion i enjoyed what I have read so far.

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devonsewn
devonsewnAuthor

Thanks for the review! I agree that I may have rushed it, several other people also mentioned that I should just do a time-skip to his adulthood but I wanted to flesh out few of relationship first. At the beginning I was severely lost, It is my first novel so, you can notice that first ten chapters are a mess. But I feel like I am improving lately and I am sure latest chapters would be a much smoother reads. Once again thanks for the support !

BludKratz
BludKratzLv13

Cool no problem it’s always great to see an author so happy to improve I wish you the best with you’re career. I’ve been stockpiling chapters for a little while now so I’ll be catching up eventually.

devonsewn:Thanks for the review! I agree that I may have rushed it, several other people also mentioned that I should just do a time-skip to his adulthood but I wanted to flesh out few of relationship first. At the beginning I was severely lost, It is my first novel so, you can notice that first ten chapters are a mess. But I feel like I am improving lately and I am sure latest chapters would be a much smoother reads. Once again thanks for the support !
KingAlexander1
KingAlexander1Lv4

hey can you take the lock out of the chapters

devonsewn:Thanks for the review! I agree that I may have rushed it, several other people also mentioned that I should just do a time-skip to his adulthood but I wanted to flesh out few of relationship first. At the beginning I was severely lost, It is my first novel so, you can notice that first ten chapters are a mess. But I feel like I am improving lately and I am sure latest chapters would be a much smoother reads. Once again thanks for the support !
devonsewn
devonsewnAuthor

I can't. It's not possible because of the contract

KingAlexander1:hey can you take the lock out of the chapters
shinigami78
shinigami78Lv2

iam enjoying it so far. i dont feel it being to rushed definitely not a slow novel but its not that rushed at least for me its good.

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