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Someone_Or_Other
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2023-05-12 23:32

Writing quality: deteriorates. It started out okay but got worse as time went on, almost like the author stopped caring or fired his editor or something. Updating stability: good. I dropped this, so I don’t know if it stayed good, but at least it started out that way. Story development: scattershot and ruined. The premise of the story was very interesting at first, but it stopped being interesting when the author decided to have a time skip instead of developing the story he had already started working on. Now, keep in mind that it’s the *worst* kind of time skip - the kind where important things happen during the skip, but the author doesn’t bother informing you of them. The MC even gained and, I assume, lost love interests during the skip. It was jarring and ruined any bit of enjoyment I still got out of this because of its abruptness. Character design: horrible. In the beginning, the side characters only exist to worship at the altar of the MC. After the time skip, it seems like the characters only exist to annoy him. There’s no real in between. World background: bland and wrong. The author has no clue how westerners act, yet set his novel in the west. Further compounding that is that he sets it in the world of the uber rich, but doesn’t seem to know how to write rich lifestyles beyond “whatever’s the most expensive is the best.” All that’s missing are the common tropes: KTVs, car racing, and restaurants with private rooms. The author already refers to people as “Mr. Firstname” so I fully expect by now that more of the other tropes have shown up. Overall: this started out promising but got real bad real quick in every aspect. Don’t waste your time on it.

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This novel has an interesting premise. That, however, is quite literally the only positive aspect of the novel, in my opinion. Interactions are highly superficial, depictions of the wealthy and nobility are skewed, and the characters are so bland that it makes you wonder if any thought was put into making them come across as humans. From the very beginning, there are some plot points that take away from the reading experience. The main character, who is supposedly 10 years old, acts like a robot. The author seems to believe that blind people are also emotionless. The plot is also severely lacking, progressing so quickly that it creates utter disbelief. The whole process, from the protagonist getting adopted by his foster family to the publication of his first book and the establishment of his own company, takes mere months. The protagonist publishes (plagiarizes) a masterpiece like The Hobbit while having been blind for most of his life without the necessary education or an adequate sense for the intricacies of literature. It is justified with the excuse of him being a genius, but that makes no sense. I doubt that there exists a single ten-year-old in the world who has such an astounding grasp of the language and an innate understanding of the challenges that come with being a writer. Granted, that is not his own ability, but everyone apart from the protagonist believes otherwise, which contradicts basic common sense. These, of course, are just a few examples of the jarring plot points that shifted my perspective from that of a reader to that of a critic. Finally, I would still like to congratulate the author for taking the difficult step of writing this novel. Although my review might seem extremely harsh, I hope that the author, assuming that my review comes to their attention, understands that my frustration towards this novel stems from the fact that it shows a lot of wasted potential.

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